It's undeniable that successful people do a lot of things that are at risk but correct in the position of that time. It seems to some people that doing things with 100 percent certain to do well is a better chance to be successful. Because they think we could make fewer mistakes so that we can get a better score than others who want to take risks. While I will take this point in a pinch of salt. In my view, it's necessary for the one who wants to get the best to try new things and take risks.
First of all, the achievement that no one has got ever is accompanied by the risks. We call a thing full of "risks" because we are not familiar with it. I really love the speech made by the US president when our humankind looks at the moon. He said “We choose to go to the moon, not because they are easy but because they are hard.” Nobody could ensure Armstrong will be successful before he comes back to the earth. He was in great danger at every moment he traveled through the universe. And of course, he is one of the most successful people in the whole civilization.
On the other hand, risks are full of chance. If we search in the history, we will find plenty of miracles happened in the risks we had met. At this period of time, the one who could overcome the risks first will be successful at last. The Peking University’s statistics figures suggested that 95% of the richest men in China grew in the chaotic period in the last century of China. They grab the opportunity which the ordinary people never find in the risks.
After what we have discussed above, we can easily come to the conclusion that though doing the things we are familiar will get less trouble, choosing the risky way always a better choice for the one wants to be a hero.
- Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well 60
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement All university students should be required to take history courses no matter what their field of study is 70
- For success in a future job the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school 60
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement All university students should be required to take history courses no matter what their field of study is 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement All university students should be required to take history courses no matter what their field of study is 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 350, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ore than others who want to take risks. While I will take this point in a pinch of sa...
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Line 3, column 148, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ppened in the risks we had met. At this period of time, the one who could overcome the risks f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, really, so, well, while, of course, first of all, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1436.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 332.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.32530120482 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39770387816 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53313253012 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 444.6 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.144001255 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.4705882353 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5294117647 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94117647059 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238790497692 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0759684476877 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0732169713954 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146099759085 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108011897863 0.0645574589148 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 58.1214874552 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.83 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.96 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 86.8835125448 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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