Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Technological improvement creates a global change and plays a pivotal role in our daily and future lives. Some people believe that easy access to several gadgets devices and the last usage of technology everywhere critics our children's creativity. In contrary, others disagree. They assert that the easy access and use of those devices make our kids unable to use their cognitive capability. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the second position. I think that the more technology we have, the more lazy generation becomes in the present and the future. Perhaps, technology brings the easiest way to have the answer for any concern or information which encourages our generation and our kids to use them without building any efforts of thinking. Also, our busy lives force us to prefer the system and technology to present the information. And, our kids and we enjoy that improvement. Following is a brief interpretation to my perspective.
First of all, when we talk about technology, we know that we are mentioning the internet power and the computer devices. Our parents think we are lucky to have our cell-phones; the small mobile computers everywhere we go. Because, they are doable and very helpful to assist us with any situation, such as we can use then as a dictionary and as a GPS map for find any address. However, they do not realize how important for our kids and for us to search for the information in the libraries among books or drive our cars depending our reading roads' instructions. A good example for that myself. The first time for me to use the GPS technology makes me fool with driving. Furthermore, It is impossible for to drive my car anywhere or everywhere without using it. I do not read and feel very confident with this technology. I do not think I am the only person who does that. Most of my generation and the next generation will depend on that.
Secondly, we should not blame the easiest access of technology around us. We must blame the busy life that we live. Technology interacts with every single job in our country. For example, pharmacies, hospitals, schools, companies, and grocery shops depend on entirely the internet and computers, people study facts, and learn concepts but, they find themselves chained to the system and spending hours to fill information automatically without thinking. A good example of that, I came a country which does not use any technology or Internet. I was working in a pharmacy there. My job was less stressful and more helpful to the patient. While, now I feel lost in the system. I have to type the information, and my mind does not remember the patients or medications, I admit that I lost my intelligence. Consequently, our children do not need to think about simple mathematical questions like one plus one equals two. They automatically, use their touch-screen devices to get the answer.
Last but not the least, those technological devices add enormously fun in our lives. Our kids do not need to watch TV or play any physical games inside the house; they prefer to sit long hours watching Youtube or playing video games. Unfortunately, they become nonsocial people, most of their friends are invisible characters; therefore, the strat missing the concept the more they use those computers the harder their thinking they become.
Based on the factors discussed above, I agree with that the improvement in the technology deprives our children and us of being creative as our parent and our grandparents. I feel this way because those devices attracts us for the easiest and the fastest way to get the information, our recent life is busier than our parents, and it is fun and joyable in our daily life.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Because, they are doable and very helpful to assist us with any situation, such as we can use then as a dictionary and as a GPS map for find any address.
Description: The token for is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to for and find
Sentence: A good example for that myself.
Description: The token that is not usually followed by a pronoun, singular, reflexive
Suggestion: Refer to that and myself
Sentence: Furthermore, It is impossible for to drive my car anywhere or everywhere without using it.
Description: The token for is not usually followed by an infinitival to
Suggestion: Refer to for and to
Sentence: Unfortunately, they become nonsocial people, most of their friends are invisible characters; therefore, the strat missing the concept the more they use those computers the harder their thinking they become.
Error: strat Suggestion: start
Sentence: I feel this way because those devices attracts us for the easiest and the fastest way to get the information, our recent life is busier than our parents, and it is fun and joyable in our daily life.
Error: joyable Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Words: 630 350 //the introduction is too long. Don't start to discuss the ideas from the introduction paragraph.
the examples should be shorter. We are expecting:
No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Write the essay in 30 minutes.
follow this user by three reasons but less examples:
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 36 15
No. of Words: 630 350
No. of Characters: 2980 1500
No. of Different Words: 291 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.01 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.73 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.704 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 195 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 153 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 100 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 74 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.203 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.417 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.264 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.264 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.127 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 849, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hnology to present the information. And, our kids and we enjoy that improvement. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, for example, i feel, i think, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 34.0 13.8261648746 246% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 98.0 43.0788530466 227% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3060.0 1977.66487455 155% => OK
No of words: 630.0 407.700716846 155% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85714285714 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.00997013923 4.48103885553 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82920022227 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 302.0 212.727598566 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479365079365 0.524837075471 91% => OK
syllable_count: 970.2 618.680645161 157% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 29.0 9.59856630824 302% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 36.0 20.6003584229 175% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.130035956 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.0 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.30555555556 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162518612574 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0443998953129 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0359947634138 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101390218204 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0180631260441 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 86.8835125448 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Write the essay in 30 minutes. We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.