Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made it easier for people to connect on a deeper level. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Advancement of technologies have been facilitated us to connect and communicate passed the limitation of time and place. There are immense benefits such as we could place a call to other continent with no expenses or send letter and receive it immediately. However, when it comes to build a deeper, honest, and real connection, I would like to beg the differ.
Firstly, modern communication usually utilizes our information upfront for the world to see. It is pressure people especially a youngster to make the best façade they can provide even though its’ superfluous or even a lie. These worsen by the spread of information that is put glamorous and over the top celebrity life style as a special and elusive identity. The fake person created prevents us to know the real character and denied us the deep and true connection we thrive.
Secondly, to build a deep relation, we need to know norm, value, preferences and dislike of the other person. We used to utilize their reaction or emotion to gauge and know people character. The modern technology eliminates this. We get reaction from chat or twitter that through process of significant editing and revision.
Lastly, technology tend to made us abandoned the person near us. We too concentrate and obsess with other person who does not exist and forget to build connection to family and friends. This made us unable to construct deeper connection even though they are in close proximity.
Ultimately, honest and deep connection build based on our daily interaction with real people through mutual understanding and likeness. Modern technologies supplant the archaic way and replace it with interesting yet somehow shallow way to communicate. Based all the stated reason, I believe that technology put more distance and prevent us to build the deeper connection.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 349, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...nd real connection, I would like to beg the differ. Firstly, modern communication usua...
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Line 7, column 262, Rule ID: CLOSE_SCRUTINY[1]
Message: Use simply 'proximity'.
Suggestion: proximity
...eper connection even though they are in close proximity. Ultimately, honest and deep connec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1539.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 298.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1644295302 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85310096681 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.604026845638 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.3885001691 48.9658058833 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.5294117647 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5294117647 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88235294118 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149526541424 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.048090865365 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0320309533572 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0842544124474 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380600129706 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.