Rapid advancement in technology has been both boon and bane to the mankind. Personally, I feel that television advertising directed towards young children should not be allowed. I feel this way due to certain reasons that I will explore in my essay.
Primordially, television advertising pursue people into thinking that the product is useful for them, even though that might not be the case. To elaborate my opinion I would like to illustrate it by providing an example. Let us consider that an ad is regarding baby oil which claims to make baby skin smooth and healthy. As the ad is being presented by the company there is no authenticity attached to it. There is not enough statistical evidence attached to prove what the ad claims is true enough.
By the same token, I would like to state that repeated exposure to specific things make us believe that it is true even though that might not be the case. In my opinion ads directed towards young children have to be made by concerned authorities and government rather than companies. In that case authorities would be responsible for fully checking the properties of the product before advertising it. This would further reduce down the cases of false promising products.
In conjunction with that, I would like to contend that it is always better that parents are exposed to right sort of products for their children by the doctors. Even though I would like to agree that there might be cases where doctors have been bribed to promote a product. In contrast, I agree that there might be a large section of people who think ads directed towards young children should be allowed as it creates awareness about different things present in the market.
In winding up, I would like to affirm that ads directed towards young children is not required, and if it is present it has to be backed up by proper authorities. I would like to conclude by saying that at the end parents have to carefully choose things for their young one's and with rightful thinking. It is rightly said, "Technology is a good servant but a dangerous master".
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...asons that I will explore in my essay. Primordially, television advertising pur...
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Line 3, column 322, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s to make baby skin smooth and healthy. As the ad is being presented by the compan...
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Line 7, column 162, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[2]
Message: “Even though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ucts for their children by the doctors. Even though I would like to agree that there might ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, regarding, so, then, as to, i feel, in contrast, sort of, in my opinion, it is true, by the same token
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1743.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82825484765 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71694461601 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495844875346 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 537.3 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.736675589 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8333333333 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0555555556 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215575747493 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0716539220559 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0895267441184 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13397184469 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482163293188 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...asons that I will explore in my essay. Primordially, television advertising pur...
^^^
Line 3, column 322, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s to make baby skin smooth and healthy. As the ad is being presented by the compan...
^^
Line 7, column 162, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[2]
Message: “Even though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ucts for their children by the doctors. Even though I would like to agree that there might ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, regarding, so, then, as to, i feel, in contrast, sort of, in my opinion, it is true, by the same token
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1743.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82825484765 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71694461601 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495844875346 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 537.3 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.736675589 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8333333333 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0555555556 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215575747493 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0716539220559 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0895267441184 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13397184469 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482163293188 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.