Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Advertisements on the broadcast somewhat influence young people, so adults should take of this concern painstakingly. Personally, I believe that this contents must not be allowed without any regulation, or even just be banned. I feel this way for two main reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
Firstly, These commercial may cause health problems for youth because the advertisements which is meant to be watched by the children tend to showing sweet products. Needless to say, the kids watching these shows usually demand their parents to purchase these things. Therefore, the aged have only two choices that refusing their children and occasioning friction in the family, or buying it for their children. The latter tend to be more frequent than the former because parents avert the short-term problem. Unfortunately, use of the candy products have some health-related effects on people, especially young ones. To illustrate this, I would like to share my younger sister's experience as a young child. When she was three years old, she was looking some commercial of chocolate on the broadcast while watching cartoon. These program were noticing my sister about candies although I struggled to make her forget about these things. Needless to say, I bought the product for her whenever she see the commercial. Eventually, this repeating process culminated in my sister's toothache. Long story short, young people will want to and probably will consume candy foods after seeing the advertisement, which will pose the health concern.
Secondly, these contents may contain some indirectly harmful influence on young children. There are several advertising with corruptible meaning on broadcasts, some of which will alter the psychology of youth because children will follow the action shown on the television without being aware of the fact that it may be ignoble. For example, several years ago, I saw the commercial on which a boy steals the juice from a girl because it is so tasty that he is willing to do every thing. Although I have strong evidence that my sisters have stolen products from store or others, I am sure that it has big impact on them.
In summation, I am of the opinion of the commercials designed for kids must be regulated strictly or even prohibited. This is because it will provocative of consuming candy, and children may be influenced abominably.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 996, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'sees'.
Suggestion: sees
...bought the product for her whenever she see the commercial. Eventually, this repeat...
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Line 5, column 91, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ly harmful influence on young children. There are several advertising with corru...
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Line 5, column 103, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[8]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun advertising seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'some advertising'.
Suggestion: some advertising
...nfluence on young children. There are several advertising with corruptible meaning on broadcasts,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, look, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2020.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16624040921 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8220069842 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562659846547 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9397820784 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.55 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.3 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164346047871 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0475125048845 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477317958113 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107128534331 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.028177754957 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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