In our competitive world, it is a challenging issue for university administrators to decide how and to what extent they should allocate their financial resources. While many people believe that the university’s budget should be spent only on the educational aspects such as classes and libraries, others strongly assume that non-educational matters such as sports and social activities are also noteworthy and should be equally supported. I firmly agree with the idea of equality in the allocated budget to both sides for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
A central argument for supporting non-academic programs is the truth that universities are responsible for triggering students’ hidden talents. The university should provide an environment for students to discover themselves and find their inert genius by presenting various programs in different fields. To illustrate, activities such as football competences, art exhibitions, musical performances can turn into significant platforms to find their innate abilities. For example, when I was an undergraduate student in a computer engineering major, I had a chance to meet a prominent entrepreneur in a job fair, which holds by the university. That meeting motivates me to study business major in graduate school and run my startup, which dramatically affects my brilliant career path. As a result, investing in non-academic affairs can provide an opportunity for students to figure out their natural abilities and enhance their communicational circles, which can be well paid in the future.
Another reason which springs to mind is that university as a multi-faceted place should provide conditions in which students can improve their social skills. Entering the university is the beginning of the life-long journey of making new friends, increasing the scope of friendships, learning how to convey properly, and express the ideas freely. For instance, when I was a freshman at the university, I used to be shy, so not only had I difficulty in making friends but also talking in front of the class for presenting lectures was a nightmare for me. Fortunately, attending several communicational skill workshops at the university helped me to overcome my fear and anxiety while being among people. Also participating in the university’s gym and sports clubs led me to meet new people and make a strong relationship with them who are now my intimate friends. Consequently, investing in social affairs and sports events can play a significant role in the students’ social interactions and their future relations.
In conclusion, although there are some beliefs that universities’ priority must be assigned to educational purposes, social and physical activities are vital segments of this educational aim for the university’s responsibility in provoking dormant intelligence and enriching social networks.
- Integrated TPO 1 80
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 95
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement At universities and colleges sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans 92
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2471.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56531531532 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.31475449991 2.67179642975 124% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572072072072 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 773.1 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.2601948002 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.4375 100.406767564 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.75 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175623079763 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0571335166209 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0338093005914 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11126180365 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0408392830659 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 11.7677419355 159% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 10.9000537634 141% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.88 8.01818996416 123% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 86.8835125448 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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