Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Visiting museums is the best way to learn about a country.
As far as I am concerned, visiting museums is not the best way to learn about a country because not only do museums present limited information but also, some evidences cannot be presented in the museums. In the following paragraphs, I will pinpoint my case.
The first reason worth mentioning is that museums only can show a little kind of evidence to people. In the past, many dynasties have been ruled a certain country and each of them had influence people's life sytle in a way. Many great places were build in that time by each ruler but when a government was defeated by its rival, its unique buildings were destroyed by using methods such as fire. Nowadays, the remants of that places are also impressive for many people who visit them. These buildings can not be shown in museums and a person who visit only museums, will miss this important information. By checking these places people will learn about the culture and customs of a country which is developed since that time. For example, the country of iran is one of oldest country in the world and many great kings ruled it. One of famus one is The Cirus, which was a first person to develop and organized regulation for people's behaviour. It is now available nears his grave not in museums.
A further more subtle point is that some evidences can not be shown in museums. In different eras, many important tools or devices from distinctive dynasties were missed and after that, were shown to public in another countries. People visting a country to learn about its historical background do not about this and will lose the chance to learn from it. By visiting interacting with people, they can gain a basic knowledge about that country which shapes people's behavior and manner. For example, my friend was really intereseted about Italy and wanted to learn more about it. He traveled and saw most of its museums but he barely learn anything. After that, he went on its markets and observed the behavior of people and socilized with them. In his perspecitve, people tend to be aggresive and angry because of their financial crisis. Therefore, he acquired a great information about Italy which it could not be gained by visiting museums.
To make a long story short, based on the mentioned arguments, due to limited source of information that museums present and not finding many source of information in museums, people can not learn about a country just by seeing museums. Therefore, it is highly recommend that people pay more attention to historical places and people's habbit to grasp a better understanding of a country.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 766, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the oldest'.
Suggestion: of the oldest
...For example, the country of iran is one of oldest country in the world and many great kin...
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Line 5, column 634, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'learns'.
Suggestion: learns
...d saw most of its museums but he barely learn anything. After that, he went on its ma...
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Line 7, column 137, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun source seems to be countable; consider using: 'many sources'.
Suggestion: many sources
...on that museums present and not finding many source of information in museums, people can n...
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Line 7, column 261, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'recommended'.
Suggestion: recommended
...seeing museums. Therefore, it is highly recommend that people pay more attention to histo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, so, therefore, for example, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2149.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81838565022 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54273237771 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470852017937 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 672.3 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8008500238 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6818181818 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2727272727 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.36363636364 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242091534259 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0716410201903 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748215384143 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174605278844 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0876288593786 0.0645574589148 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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