Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Visiting museums is the best way to learn about a country.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Though today people travel around the world easier and more often than ever before, they still can not claim that they know a country completely. Knowing a country is not a rudimentary knowledge gained merely by visiting there. Personally, I believe one of the best way to get to know a country is visiting its museums. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, for knowing a country thoroughly, it is crucial to learn about its history. History contains myriad information about different aspects of a country. There are several approaches to learn history, but from my vintage point, the most remarkable way is to visit museums. Museums provide people with paintings, sculptures, pottery and all sort of artifacts of past times. These objects are so striking that they will become a part of long term memory fast and make it easier to imagine past lives of a country. All ancient people had their own way to overcome life's hardships, and they all were fascinating a distinctive way. Therefore, primitive tools, which people used during history when there was no technology, can always help us to figure out how genius and talented early people of a country were. These evidences of early civilizations in a country are things which contemporary people are usually proud of.
Another significant reason is that museums not only teach people about early civilizations located in that country, but also it teaches them about roots of believes and cultures in that country. These historic objects virtually indicate early believes and culture of a society. There are plethora of symbols and mascots which people believe they are sacred. Roots of these believes can be readily found in ancient evidences. Additionally, there must be some indicators of cultures in those ancient tools. For instance, there are great evidences of Islam profound impact on Persian culture in the ancient museums. Iran's history before and after Islam are significantly different, and it has lasted thousand years. As a result, people can understand the real cause of religion believes in Iran.
In conclusion, museums play a big role in learning about a country. Ancient objects they preserve there, are really informative and not only they indicate history of a country but also they reveal roots of many contemporary believes and cultures.
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Suggestion: many contemporaries
...a country but also they reveal roots of many contemporary believes and cultures.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, so, still, therefore, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, sort of, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1987.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08184143223 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66945931657 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542199488491 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7826989514 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.3181818182 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7727272727 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31818181818 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157117828971 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0490641562489 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0511158390242 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100400202074 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437153413155 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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