A university has
money in its budget to do one thing to improve its facilities for students. It can either improve the
quality of the technology (for example computers and printers) that it provides for students or it
can redesign spaces where students hold club meetings and gather with friends in their spare time
to make these areas more comfortable and appealing. Which idea do you prefer and why?
There are certainly disparate ways for universities to spend their budgets. The wise way is to list the requirements based on priority and spend the money accordingly. From my standpoint, purchasing high technology facilities and replacing them with obsolete ones has higher priority in comparison with anything else.
To begin with, redecorating rooms and gathering spaces by university can have positive impact on the students who use those places; however, I don’t find it an imperative task plus there are so many other things with higher importance that need to be take care of first. Moreover, there are plenty of places that are much more appealing than university rooms for gathering and meetings outside the campus. If students care that much about the ambience of their meeting room, they can easily hold their meeting in one of those places with their own money. To me, the simple provided rooms by university seem adequate and there is no need of extra expenses for renovation or redecorating.
Secondly, universities are mostly known for their academic activities and the projects students conduct in there. These projects need specific facility and equipment. Providing the requisite technology for the sake of projects progress is one of the chiefly duty of universities, actually it is so important that is considered while rating universities. For instance, last semester while I was doing my project, I had to do some tests on various antennas and submit the results on my data set; I was working at antenna lab and there were some students from other universities who were doing some experiments there due to the lack of facilities in their own university.
In conclusion, at a prominent university nothing should precede the priority of academic projects and the technology they need to be conducted; thus a large amount of budget must be spent on them and if anything left it can be spent on other parts.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1615.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 318.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0786163522 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81622165085 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553459119497 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.6299537693 48.9658058833 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.583333333 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8333333333 5.45110844103 199% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266715062098 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0936686025506 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.041918567685 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139378958563 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0593083591968 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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