Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A zoo has no useful purpose. Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.
More and more zoos are being built in these days and people do not understand their true value. I firmly believe that a zoo has a great number of benefits for children and adults. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in this essay.
First and foremost, in the technological world, there are almost no chances to interact with real nature directly. However, thanks to the zoo, people can gain knowledge about the ecosystem and environment from it with more ease. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my experience. When I was a little girl, there was no zoo in my country. Thus, I always watched these beautiful animals on TV. Nevertheless, one day I got an opportunity to travel to Singapore which had plenty of zoos. I was really looking forward to seeing it because it felt like my dream came true. During this trip, I saw hundreds of animals and even I fed them by my bare hands. Since that time, I truly wanted to become a zoologist and started to learn them from Biology books and newspapers which were the only things that I could see whenever I wanted. Today I major on zoologist as my bachelor degree and I always think that if I had not seen the zoo, I could have not understood how much it was worthwhile.
On top of this, the zoo is the only place where can protect some animals from extinction and poaching and so on. Most of the organization usually keep animals in their cages; however, in the zoo, they usually live in simulated habitats. As a result, they will feel more convenient in that area. Drawing from my own experience, Two years ago, for the first time I worked in the zoo as a part-time worker. I learned a lot of invaluable things such as how to properly take care of animals and even learned their behaviours. Some of them were born and died in the zoo, so I deeply understood how much effort the zoo spent on these animals’ lives. It goes without that zoo makes their life better because nature is becoming more harsh and ruthless and even some people are becoming monster these days. Therefore, the only rescue for these animals is the zoo.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that the zoo has plenty of benefits compared to other organizations and agencies. This is because it enhances our knowledge in this area and gives a chance to interact with real nature and more importantly protects animals from inevitable disasters.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ts animals from inevitable disasters.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, nevertheless, really, so, therefore, thus, while, even so, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2001.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55808656036 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54324728349 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510250569476 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.6495825773 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0869565217 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5652173913 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0822540880774 0.236089414692 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0264607778001 0.076458572812 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0251140019962 0.0737576698707 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0535908296174 0.150856017488 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00700376533286 0.0645574589148 11% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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