Admittedly, modern societies are too way too complicated and life is more challenging for young adults than it was for past generations. I believe that young people have a lot more things to consider, face many difficulties, and very subtle situations that they only would only be able to deal with if they have good organizational and planning abilities.
In my opinion, young people have more options to take into account in their lives than their grandparents had. For example, when they want to decide about their professions in the future, they would have too moremany different things to think about while in the past there were noticeably considerably less options. When I wanted to think and decide about my future major in the college, I consultants consulted with different people including my parents, some counselors and my teachers. I'm happy with my job now because I developed my planning skills properly when I was a teenager and I decided perfectly for my major, my university, and my current position.
Moreover, I think it's normal that people have been places placed in complicated situations in which they have to complete different tasks and finish various work in a limited period of time. As an example, during my mastersmaster’s program, when I was doing my thesis a full-time job was offered to me. Although, I wasn't supposed to have a full-time job when I was still a student, since I was really eager to get the job, I spoke with my professor and he accepted agreed to change my due date. I accepted the job and worked on my thesis at the same time. I was working under pressure in that I spent 8 to 9 hours at the office. I organized my time precisely and successfully finished my thesis on time. I barley would have barely survived if I didn't have good organization abilities and didn't manage my time appropriately.
In conclusion, people do need to acquire good abilities to plan and organize a wide variety of tasks and situations in their lives and because life today life is more complicated these skills are more crucial for young adults.
- TOEFL T P O 46 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 68
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.Use specific reasons and examples to 70
- You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your choice. 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 303, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun options is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...past there were noticeably considerably less options. When I wanted to think and dec...
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Line 3, column 490, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...rents, some counselors and my teachers. Im happy with my job now because I develop...
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Line 5, column 176, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ks and finish various work in a limited period of time. As an example, during my mastersmaster...
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Line 5, column 321, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
...time job was offered to me. Although, I wasnt supposed to have a full-time job when I...
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Line 5, column 635, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...hat I spent 8 to 9 hours at the office. I organized my time precisely and success...
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Line 5, column 710, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...uccessfully finished my thesis on time. I barley would have barely survived if I ...
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Line 5, column 751, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... barley would have barely survived if I didnt have good organization abilities and di...
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Line 5, column 794, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...nt have good organization abilities and didnt manage my time appropriately. In con...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, really, so, still, while, as for, for example, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1729.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81615598886 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88603046965 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512534818942 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.329493625 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.5 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6428571429 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1940257767 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0718665803053 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620002359842 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152139435516 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0664600347588 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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