Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is crystal clear that people are so busy these days and it is because of the pace of life in this period of time. Some people believe that because people have so many things to do, thus, they cannot have deep information about all things and they can just be an expert in some of them. However, I disagree with the statement and the enduing paragraphs explain my reasons for this position.
First of all, due to the pace of life today, people are so busy and have not enough time to focus on learning things like past days but thanks to the technology, people can put a few time and money to learn new skills so they can learn a large number of things in just a little time. For example, I needed to make slides with Powerpoint software and I had not enough time to attend a course and learn it so, I downloaded some video file on the internet to understand how to use the software. Thus, I learn a lot of about that software in just one and a half hours instead of enrolling in long-term courses.
Second, the sophisticated age that we live in it, forced us to learn and be an expert in a variety of knowledge and skills to have a better life. Thus, despite the compact time, all of us have to be professional in many of skills by managing our time. For example, last year I had a very busy schedule and besides I had to work with 3 software which I never work with them before, to elaborate on my project and keep my job. Therefore, I slept just a few hours in the night for about one week put time for learning that software.
In summation, it is deniable that we live in the fast speed days and we have not enough time but in my opinion, contemporary people are more expert in many skills not only a few skills. By using technology facilities and also time managing, people have more knowledge than the people in the past decades.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 105, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... is because of the pace of life in this period of time. Some people believe that because peopl...
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Line 1, column 290, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...hey can just be expert in some of them. However I disagree with the statement and the e...
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Line 4, column 183, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'few times'.
Suggestion: few times
...nks to the technology, people can put a few time and money to learn new skills so they c...
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Line 4, column 240, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...y to learn new skills so they can learn a large number of things in just a little time. For examp...
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Line 6, column 58, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...sticated age that we live in it, forced use to learn and be expert in variaty of kn...
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Line 6, column 506, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this software' or 'those softwares'?
Suggestion: this software; those softwares
...or about one week put time for learning those software. In summation, it is deniable that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1491.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.32173913043 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35589952033 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466666666667 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 485.1 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.0743713 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.25 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.75 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.08333333333 5.45110844103 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183789135976 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687760244438 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598449182122 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125295356352 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0885622231038 0.0645574589148 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.37 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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