Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Children rely too much on the technology, like computers, smart phones, video games for fun and entertainment. Playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for children’ s development.
In today’s world, the role of technology can be seen in every aspect of human life. Definitely, not only has the technology affected on a lifestyle of people of each society with different cultures, but people also have depended on it. In this regard, however, may be a heated controversy as to whether effects of this novel invention could be beneficial for a child or otherwise. From my own perspective, the merits of using computers, smartphones substantially outweigh its demerit. In what follows, I will pinpoint three conspicuous reasons.
The first reason coming to my mind is that it is of high necessity for children to be professional in it which is useful for their future life. Having learned to accomplish with it, they will utilize it for important activities. For instance, they will play online games such as football, chess, to name but a few, should they charge their account in various websites by credit card. Although the amount of money is not much, they learn to buy electronic articles which are of essence for their life in future. Thus, charging their accounts for playing is caused to prepare for transferring huge money and being a success in financial issues.
Alongside with the first reason, some programs in computer and smartphone increase their knowledge. Definitely, children can use this approach as one of the most effective ways of boosting their information. For instance, my child, Zahra, is five years old and plays with Memrise. This gadget teaches her how to increase English vocabulary range among of funny playing time in the fantastic environment. Instead of her, surely, I will speak English fluently had I had a chance use it. The more I spent with this gadget, the more vocabulary I could learn.
Last but not least, it is of an easy method for having excellent entertainment. In addition, in comparison to other ones, it is so cheap. For example, parents enroll their children in expensive music class for being a musician. Although they pay high tuition, they should take them to the class. Among of the road, they may be stuck in traffic. Thus, they waste their time and energies a lot. Instead of that, they can upload one gadget for this purpose.
From what has been discussed above we may reach the conclusion that playing and using with computer and smartphone, respectively, would be better for children’ s development. Having been used by new generation person during childhood, the computer and smartphone will help them in their future financial issues. Alongside that is so easy and cheap, they can improve their knowledge. It is better for children to update their toys with a new version.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 295, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...d, however, may be a heated controversy as to whether effects of this novel invention could b...
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Line 2, column 501, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...les which are of essence for their life in future. Thus, charging their accounts for play...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, thus, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2225.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97762863535 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75336337312 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539149888143 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 671.4 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.3413175054 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.4074074074 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5555555556 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7037037037 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246181804572 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071068532082 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0728565643914 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146675189624 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049381884683 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.