Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that famous people like any other citizen have the right of a desirable privacy. But unfortunately, they have not an adequate secure life. Contrary to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that the well-known entertainers now have enough privacy and the source of lack of security is just their terrible behavior and the information they share in the public social networks to attract more followers. However, I to a great extent, agree with this idea that famous people deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
First and foremost, there are some misbeliefs in people minds that the famous people should have a very friendly relationship with their adherent and it means that people have this allow to communicate with famous people in anywhere and any time. For example, last week when I had a lunch with my friend at the restaurant, we meet a favorite actor at here where he was really angry from one person who wants to take a photograph with him. Because the actor was within a serious discussion with his wife but man interrupt them. However, everybody needs some privet time otherwise this kind of happens can threaten their mental health and happiness.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that some of the social networks try to take advantage from their fame between people through using their name or sharing some of their privet photos in their websites to increase their viewers. Sometimes may some culprits people try to extortion from famous people by frightening them of transmitting some of their personal information in public networks. In addition, I know that there is some criminal groups in the film industry or popular sports, who want to by manipulating these industries their own favor in order to maximize own profit. Even through the distribution of fake news about famous people to force them to accept their request.
Finally, yet importantly, famous people like other ones are not exempt from the mistake. For instance, may they occasionally become angry during driving but it is not true that people abuse from this kind of event in opposes of them. Obviously, a driving debate does not affect our job position or our future life. So we should respect the right of famous people similar to other ones.
On the basis of reasons that was mentioned above, I am convinced that well-known people deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Because in the present condition their happiness, healthy of the social and family life of them is not appropriate.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 188, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'communicating'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: communicating
...nd it means that people have this allow to communicate with famous people in anywhere and any ...
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Line 3, column 278, Rule ID: HAVE_A_BREAKFAST[1]
Message: When we speak of types of meals, the article is not required: 'had lunch'.
Suggestion: had lunch
...any time. For example, last week when I had a lunch with my friend at the restaurant, we me...
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Line 5, column 74, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...uld be taken into consideration is that some of the social networks try to take advantage f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, really, so, still, well, for example, for instance, in addition, kind of, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2154.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96313364055 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53529943195 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527649769585 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.3505062476 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.666666667 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1111111111 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.22222222222 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199567229522 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0780567399435 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11113146177 0.0737576698707 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143530598898 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119951060309 0.0645574589148 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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