Nowadays, it commonly accepted that involving in such different activities and programs during daily time have several advantages over focus on just on one special task. Contrary to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that when people engaged in the variety of programs it damage to their concentration to doing every single task well, and it leads to diminishing in the efficiency of works and lack in quality of results. However, I, to a great extent disagree with this idea that because of people busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well.
First and foremost, participation in different programs improve people abilities and skills in the different aspect of life and provide able and talented people for society. Imaging one businessman who just spend all of his time behind of his desk and try to attract costumers only by using his perspective knowledge that obtain at the university some years ago, or an employee who involve in some different social skill classes, new advance strategy to attract more costumers, going to the literature class and poetry, sport and visit with his psychologist and so on. For sure, the second employee would be more successful in his career, because, maintaining knowledge update and increasing skills in the variety of programs opened people mind, eliminate boring and tedium, and raising creativity, positive energy and happiness.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that this lifestyle improves mental health and hope. For example, the traditional families believed that it is better mothers just concentrate on their role at home as a mother and wife, but it provided lack in personality and depression to them. Today, the brilliant mothers not only have several different social roles like job and clubs but also it makes them a better master to training children.
Finally, yet importantly, some criticize of this view argue that engaging many different works, caused to split between members of the family, because anyone is busy with their own interest. However, it is true that this kind of family spends a lower time with one other but there is a more positive atmosphere at home with more effective relationships between them.
On the basis of reasons that mentioned above, I convinced that because people do many different works, they do their tasks more efficiently, through significant increases in their skills and health that provide success and happiness.
- TPO 45 66
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they already know how to do well.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 63
- Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. 90
- TPO 49 INTEGRATED 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'damages'?
Suggestion: damages
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Message: Use simply 'several'.
Suggestion: several
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, second, so, still, well, for example, kind of, it is true, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2096.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18811881188 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66675958894 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564356435644 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 662.4 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.28347167 48.9658058833 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 174.666666667 100.406767564 174% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.6666666667 20.6045352989 163% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.66666666667 5.45110844103 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22806046601 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0959087272209 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.174889953635 0.0737576698707 237% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140717916014 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.145179131203 0.0645574589148 225% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.8 11.7677419355 168% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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