Thanks to the invention of the Internet, people are connected together and able to learn global news immediately. When it comes to the controversial problem whether to learn news happened around the world or not, people hold different opinions. Some people advocate it is important to know about events happening in other countries. Others dispute that news has no effect on their daily life. Personally, I believe that it is crucial to know about evens happening around the world based on the following reasons.
First, knowing events in other countries help a person to interact and communicate with foreigners more smoothly, especially for those work with foreigners. Have you ever got a chance to talk to a foreigner but your brain was totally blank? The news in the foreigner's country becomes great materials. In addition, it makes people be respected to you because you are interested in their culture and country which leads to more possibility between you two such as business. Take my father for example, he went on a business trip to Mexico for 3 months. Before he went there, he brought a lot of cargoes to Mexico, because he knew the tragic earthquake just killed thousands of Mexican and hundreds of building collapsed. When he gave those cargoes to the homeless because of the earthquake, this kind and generous behavior help him get the dealership to sell shoes. So, according to my father's example, are you still saying it is unrelated to your life? Well, I don't think so. Instead, it may be important to your career more than you think.
Second, learning news around the world enlarges our view. We can learn history and cultures from other countries. Moreover, the experience from other countries may help the development of our community. For example, China used to be a conservative country. Chinese are not allowed to say bad things about their government. Because of the Internet, they learn democracy from other countries by watching the voting news in a liberal country such as the United State. According to a research, despite the teenagers in China cannot vote in their country, they learn how the democracy works and vote the global issue on the Internet.
In conclusion, for the reasons I mentioned above, I think it is essential and beneficial for a person to know about events happening around the world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 960, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...g it is unrelated to your life? Well, I dont think so. Instead, it may be important ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, still, well, as to, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1946.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95165394402 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67083468918 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541984732824 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.4099027842 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.6086956522 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0869565217 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21739130435 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229320797045 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0644669947754 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0751346653817 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15033890782 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0740274102737 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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