Do you agree or disagree with the following statement.
It is more important to spend moeny on improving facilities(like libraries, computer labs, technology in general) than hiring famous teachers.
There have been pros and cons regarding the argument that it is more important that to spend money on improving
focilities than hiring famous teachers.
While both sides may have their own reasons to support their arguments,
I am totally agree with this statement with several reasons and examples as follows.
To start with using improved facilities rather than hiring famous teachers is a great way for me to broaden perspective on the real world.
This is attributed to the fact that getting opportunities to use improved facilities offers opportunities for students to have a balanced view point and get-up-to-date knowledge.
Over the decades, today's rat-race society has been evolving and changing at a surprising speed with such a hectic life style.
However, in this context, many of them would like to expand and widen intellectual horizons through using improved facilities.
This is because, using improved facilities allows them to look outside the box and approach things in a different way.
From my experience, while growing up, I have been exposed to some information and thus acquired knowledge about things through hiring famous teachers.
The problem of this is that most of information and knowledge, I have obtained and conveyed from certain types of eve one source's particular viewpoint by improved facilities, which is restricting my self within narrow limits on the world.
Given this, in order to grow up in academic aspects with wide perspectives toward the globalized world, getting opportunities to use improved facilities is effective for me to learn about many different viewpoints and keep the balanced way of thinking through it.
Without the help of using improved facilities, I would have had a biased and slanted view of using facilities rather than hiring famous teachers.
Thus, this proves that using improved facilities is more important .
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...portant that to spend money on improving focilities than hiring famous teachers. ...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'agreed'.
Suggestion: agreed
... support their arguments, I am totally agree with this statement with several reason...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a different way" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ook outside the box and approach things in a different way. From my experience, while growing up,...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ortunities to use improved facilities is effective for me to learn about many dif...
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ies is effective for me to learn about many different viewpoints and keep the balanced way of...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ng improved facilities is more important .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, may, regarding, so, thus, while, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1594.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 299.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33110367893 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81933010168 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558528428094 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3322295685 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.833333333 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9166666667 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 14.0 4.53405017921 309% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233009259732 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100935018856 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707529041167 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0994133584192 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0702641317212 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.