Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Throughout histoy, in all civilized society, preparation of teenage children for adult life engendered copious controverises among people. Some people hold the view that parents can prepare their children for adult life bye stimulate them to take a part-time job. However, some others may make an opposite viewpoint and believe that it is better for teenage to focus on their school's homeworks. As far as I am concerned, parents should encouage their children to take temprary job because not only do they learn responsibility, but also they gain experiences.
The first reason to point out is that teenage children learin how to be responbile. To illustrate, there many ways for children to learn vital matters for their future life and on the best choice is to get hire and perform a job. Moreover, responsibilty helps children after finding their duties, trying hard to finish them. For example, when a person's job is to wash dishes, he get that there is a time that washes has to be done and also he know that if by accident a dish broke, he hast to be responsible for that and buy a dish like broken one.
A further more subtle point is that children gain effective experiences. To demonstrate, when a person have experiences can made efficient decision in his life. Therefore, it is necessary for children to obtain experiences by taking a job. For instance,when a student working in a crowded place, at first he can not talk to his co worker but after a while he learn how to talk to his co worker and learn to be social and in the adult life this feature are going to help him to progress in his life. Consider that another person work as a clerk. He encounter to new people every day and sould talk to them. By this way he can learn different information from different people and this information might be helpful in future.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned argument, it is helpful for children that their parents allow and encourage them to get a temporary job. Consequently it is highly recommended that teenage student get prepare for their future adult life by accepting a part-time job.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 379, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gets'.
Suggestion: gets
...hen a persons job is to wash dishes, he get that there is a time that washes has to...
^^^
Line 2, column 443, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'knows'.
Suggestion: knows
... that washes has to be done and also he know that if by accident a dish broke, he ha...
^^^^
Line 3, column 252, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , when
...xperiences by taking a job. For instance,when a student working in a crowded place, a...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 359, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'learns'.
Suggestion: learns
...k to his co worker but after a while he learn how to talk to his co worker and learn ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 548, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'encounters'.
Suggestion: encounters
...that another person work as a clerk. He encounter to new people every day and sould talk ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 713, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...e and this information might be helpful in future. To make a long story short, based on ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 161, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Consequently,
... encourage them to get a temporary job. Consequently it is highly recommended that teenage s...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1757.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72311827957 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74011509253 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505376344086 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5018967322 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.352941176 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8823529412 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.70588235294 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.414999264206 0.236089414692 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134918694061 0.076458572812 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103936622622 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.276208051696 0.150856017488 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0917957805053 0.0645574589148 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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