Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like like do-rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Enjoyment provides a person to obtain satisfaction and sometimes people do many things only for pleasure. However, a plethora of people contents that people nowadays spend too much time only for enjoyment but others disagree with the statement. Not surprisingly, the number of controversies over this issue is overwhelmed. Among this controversy, I personally believe that people spend less time on thinking by thinking about what should do. I feel this way for several reasons I will expound subsequent followings.
To commence with, with the rapid increase in technology people nowadays spend more time on the internet, social media, email, youtube because of pleasure. Moreover, modern days are so complex and people spend a lot of time in the class, office, business those are a really stressful job. Thus, after backing from that workplace they just want to spend time relaxing rather than think about what needs to really do. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in college I was busy most of the day with classes, assignment, project etc. Therefore, at the weekdays I really felt tired and at the weekend I wanted to enjoy the day freely and without any pressure.
Furthermore, human lives in a group and enjoy to spend time with friends and family. Besides, modern people think that life is short and before died they should enjoy life. Moreover, most of the people are now financially independent and afford their personal expectation. As a result, they want different things that really satisfy them. For instance, I have a brother who likes travelling. Last year my brother spent a million dollars only for travelling because it gave him pleasure and satisfaction. My parents asked him why did you spend so much money only for travelling. He answered, just for fun and I want to experience a different culture, a tradition of different people.
To recapitulate, I am on the opinion that people like to spend time enjoying because it gives more pleasure and sometimes people spend only to experience different things.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'enjoy spending'.
Suggestion: enjoy spending
...Furthermore, human lives in a group and enjoy to spend time with friends and family. Besides, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, really, so, therefore, thus, for instance, i feel, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07917888563 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75955416484 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554252199413 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.8364570893 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.6 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.05 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299195211922 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0820070223549 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0716308839661 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177703775417 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604483793299 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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