tpo 46
In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in electronic databases rather than on paper. It is argued that storing patients' medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping.
The reading and lecture are both about electronic medical record system. The author of the reading feels that electronic database has several advantages over the traditional system. The lecturer challenged the claim made by the author. He is on the opinion that benefits are actually uncertain.
To begin with, the author argues that electronic formate will reduce the cost of storing and transferring record. He also claims that doctors can easily access the records and can transfer and copy the records when necessary. The specific argument is challenged by the lecturer. He mentions that it will not probably save the money because they need paper records for the backup. He also additionally says for authentication required signature of the doctor, thus paper record must be kept.
Secondly, the author suggests that electronic records help to reduce the error due to the unclear handwriting and improper data. He also states this will help to increase the medical condition of some of the patients. The lecturer rebuts this by mentioning that most of the doctor still used paper for prescribing to the patients. He also mentions that stuff related to this work may cause an error when they transfer the written document to the electronic formate.
Third, The author posits that in paper-based sometimes it is difficult to keep a record of thousands of patients. He elaborates this by mentioning that an electronic database can easily accessible from anywhere. In contrast, the lecturer position is that research shows that maybe some privacy issue is connected with the records, He adds that sometimes doctor needs to ask permission of the patients to the access the data and also the doctor cannot access the patient's record until they open the access from blocked mode
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...advantages over the traditional system. The lecturer challenged the claim made by t...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...lp to increase the medical condition of some of the patients. The lecturer rebuts this by m...
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Line 7, column 484, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... cannot access the patients record until they open the access from blocked mode
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thus, in contrast, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1494.0 1373.03311258 109% => OK
No of words: 290.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15172413793 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61611442731 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 145.348785872 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503448275862 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 463.5 419.366225166 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.468469616 49.2860985944 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.375 110.228320801 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.125 21.698381199 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.06452816374 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.457963659941 0.272083759551 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151751167163 0.0996497079465 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102975938864 0.0662205650399 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.282105240884 0.162205337803 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620580714512 0.0443174109184 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.3589403974 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.7273730684 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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