The longest study on happiness at Harvard University in psychotherapy, has revealed that happiness in people’s lives have directly related to the quality of one’s interaction with others. In terms of friendships, both approaches are noteworthy but in my point of view, long- lasting relationships could bring more exhilaration and joyfulness for individuals.
Friendship is more like work of art built up over time based on different feelings and emotions in different colors one experiences with his/her friends. Trust, forgiveness and compassion through memories of the best and worst in life would complete and shape it. It is all about time as Antoine de Saint-Exupery in The Little Prince said: “It is the time you spend on your rose that makes your rose so important”. Therefore, trying to keep old friends who one has emotional connections with, is more important for happiness in life.
On the other hand, friends who one has shared part of his/her life with, especially crazy experiences, find a lot in common, and know each other well enough, so they are themselves, no need to pretend to be someone else. Actually they are not going to make any judgments, instead they support and encourage each other, which could be the most important reason to be happy with these people. For example I have some friends from that time at high school, now, even though we are far from each other as we are in different cities, we need to get together every month reviewing memories and talking about what are going in our lives and have very great time. Actually these gatherings help me reduce stress and make me so pleased.
In conclusion, I believe that being in touch with people who one has emotional connection which definitely occur over a long period of time would be more effective for happiness in life, rather than easily making new ones.
- It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. 73
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- do you agree or disagree The most important problems in the world will be solved in our lifetime 65
- TOEFL essay: Some people think that the family is the most important influence on young adults. Other people think that friends are the most important influence on young adults. Which view do you agree with? Use examples to support your position. 76
- Which one do you prefer? Why?1) a company offering you a job with challenging and interesting projects but less vacation days or2) another company offering you a job that is not so challenging and interesting but has more vacation days. 90
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, if, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, talking about, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1565.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 313.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78481379369 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610223642173 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.3791985981 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.272727273 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4545454545 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.09090909091 5.45110844103 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242684309343 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0903831226679 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656813604281 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158209281224 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543151746726 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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