Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
In the past people were more close to each other than now, they liked to be unite and extended. In my opinion, for today's world is less important to be extended family. I feel this way for three reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, now a day’s people are too much busy and cannot find time to spend with their cousins, aunts, and uncles. 21st century requires hours of job from you to earn money for survival. For example, I am a civil engineer, I work 10 hours per day. When I wake up early in the morning, I just do 10 minutes’ meditation, after I eat breakfast. Then, I go to my office, which starts from 8:00 am to 6:00 pm. when I come back to home I have no energy and time to even be with my wife and children, so how is it possible to meet my extended family. That is why it makes to be far away from them. Therefore, work creates distance between families and makes it less important.
Secondly, another factor that makes extended family less prominent, it is creating more problems. when you be in connection with your all relatives you have to follow their instruction as well. For example, in developing countries, where they respect and wanted to be unite it creates more debates and arguments between families, especially, one person name himself as a leader of tribe and you should follow his orders. In addition, you have no right to give feedback. That is why it makes it less important.
Thirdly, technology keeps everyone separate and no one wants to meet their relatives. social media is a great example of this reason, everyone is using Facebook, Twitter, Instagram and so on. On this software, you can make many friends. Most of them are your relatives, so when you want to say greetings, you do not need to meet them just open up your social media software and write down, Hi. This is the case that makes relationships with relative state lower.
In conclusion, the extended family becomes less important. because we have less time to meet them. It makes problems of being independent and technology make us far from each other.
- The integrated task from Official TOEFL ibt Volume 2 test #3 100
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, well, for example, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1724.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 376.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58510638298 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52893508723 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553191489362 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.079619739 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.9565217391 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.347826087 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.17391304348 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213209206737 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0594563601629 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513399948669 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119122543684 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352503529883 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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