Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
In the past, before 1800 A.D., most of the people were lived around the castle in suburban. they worked as tenants, growing crops for the whole community. In order to exploit labor force completely, they live together with their relatives, which named extended family. But the situations are pretty different right now and the extended families are less important, comparing with 18 centurys.
The most part would be the difference of works. back in the days, people were mostly farmers and they tend to live together as an extended family in order to make use of everyone in the house. The same kind of work would be passed on to the next generation so their children would do the exact same work as their parents. Therefore, the whole family stayed in the same place and work as a team generation by generation. That is why the extended families were so important back then. However, modern people are more independent and we have so many career options to choose, like architects, painters, engineers, bankers. And it certainly broke the connection between relatives in the families. We are now free from the land restriction and work restriction. We can move wherever we want without punishments.
Then, the developement of the cities made the extended families even less essentail to our lives. In the big cities, people lived in apartments, which means that people are seperated into little group or individual. As a result, we have less contacts with others, including our relatives even though they might lived in the same building.
Due to the reasons above, the extended families are now less important than in the past.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 93, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...re lived around the castle in suburban. they worked as tenants, growing crops for th...
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Line 5, column 49, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Back
... part would be the difference of works. back in the days, people were mostly farmers...
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Line 9, column 238, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun contacts is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...oup or individual. As a result, we have less contacts with others, including our rel...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, then, therefore, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1371.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 275.0 407.700716846 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98545454545 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59386689222 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563636363636 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 423.0 618.680645161 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.4041974884 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.6470588235 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1764705882 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47058823529 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188926648329 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0662773540681 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0894038000581 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166544958408 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109659345339 0.0645574589148 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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