Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The government is not doing enough work to educate people the importance of nutrition and healthy eating.
It is critically important for people to have a balanced diet since people’s health is determined by what they eat. Some argue that the government does less work than expected to make citizens aware of the importance of foods. I think this idea doesn’t make any sense.
First of all, the government has been teaching students in school how to eat healthily, which helps them keep a good habit when they grow up. What people learn when they are young has a huge impact on their further behavior. At the same time, their outlooks and thinkings are formed. Accordingly, educating young children is an effective way to help individuals eat healthy foods. For instance, when I was in primary school, there was a class in which our teacher taught us what food contains and what people need to eat every day. I noticed most of my classmates listened carefully and took notes. Some of them sometimes shared what they learned with their parents. When we graduated, I clearly remembered one boy who had been really fat became much slimmer, and he told us he had changed his eating habits due to that helpful class.
Secondly, the government make strict laws and supervise food supplies and restaurants, which guarantee city dwellers can eat healthy foods. People tend to eat fast food nowadays in order to save time. There are increasingly more restaurants and food shops are opened. With effective restriction, the foods are assured to be fresh and clean, so people are less likely to get sick. About five years ago, there was a fried chicken restaurant in our community. When I once left home for school, I went there and bought some chicken. However, that afternoon, I had a stomachache and a fever. I realized it had to be caused by the chicken that I ate. When I was recovered, I went to the community office and complained about what had happened, asking them to check that restaurant. Just two days later, the restaurant was closed according to the laws about food security.
In conclusion, the government makes efforts to teach students about food and human need and makes related laws to create a good environment where people can eat healthy foods. Given these facts, I firmly believe the government has done a lot to let people realize it is essential to keep a balanced diet.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, however, look, really, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, i think, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1910.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82323232323 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60733637828 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565656565657 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.0590030435 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0434782609 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2173913043 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26086956522 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107490125284 0.236089414692 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0305821099685 0.076458572812 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0345098465282 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0792659157925 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292945464944 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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