Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is argued that famous people have more effect on young people than older people. In my opinion, I believe that celebrities need to be careful about the negative effects on young people. In particular in terms of imitation and inspiration.
On the one hand, the imitation is, maybe, one of the most important values in the effectiveness in young people. Imitation is trying to do the exact thing what the other one does. Thanks to having this movement, one tries to act like others. Basically, celebrities are known around the world if we ask anyone. Therefore, any kind of bad attitude creates horrible mistakes because of young people's wondering. So, especially, teenagers, usually curious about being famous in the future, try to copy famous entertainers' behaviors. This happens much more than at young ages in spite of older ages. As a result, celebrity people should be careful about teenagers. The imitation can be more dangerous.
In addition to imitation, inspiration is another noteworthy reason. The inspiration is giving someone an idea about something not discovered before and helping to get explore it. Owing to having this, one wants to get inspired by his dreamed person such as like superhero or the character in a movie. Furthermore, such kind of thoughts come from TV. While young people watching television more than parents, they may able to catch ideas, thoughts and etc. So, celebrities ought to inspire young people positively. As a consequence, inspiring teenage people create a great combination of efficient future outcomes.
In a nutshell, when all the specific reasons and relevant examples are considered and evaluated, it can be concluded that the ideas of celebrities more valuable to younger people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 448, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
... they may able to catch ideas, thoughts and etc. So, celebrities ought to inspire young ...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, may, so, therefore, while, in addition, in particular, kind of, such as, as a result, in my opinion, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 43.0788530466 32% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1468.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 282.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20567375887 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81354767162 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.613475177305 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.021810974 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.4 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.1 20.6045352989 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197230246806 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0556052440349 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577001838199 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132604645905 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328038163292 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 58.1214874552 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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