The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Never before the history had the social media played such an indispensable role in our society. As a result, the perspective of some celebrities can now have a considerable influence on public. Under this circumstance, some people will argue that whether the opinion of those celebrities are more important to younger or not. As far as I'm concerned, I strongly hold the idea that the they do affect younger people more.
First and the foremost, it can not be gainsaid that younger people are not capable to establish their own view of the world. Not to mention that they usually don't want to follow their parents or teachers advises. So, it's easy to conclude that the opinion of eminent celebrities can play a important role in the process of building their own view of the world.
Furthermore, the fact that younger people are eager to gain success indicates that they admire those preeminent celebrities by a large margin.
Take the case of chairman mao, who was definitely an idealist in his juvenile period. he actually really hated to follow his parents' lead, on the contrary, he is a fanatic admirer of Sun zhongshan who was a revolution hero of china, his principle ,thought and the dream of changing the fata of china along with Chinese people have a prefunding influence on mao’s mind, which finally lead him to organize the second revolution of china and ultimately change the whole china. I have to mention that not only mao, but also many famous revolution leaders were all affected by other pioneer when they were young.
Last but not the least, people in younger age are now much more familiar with the internet which is the major channel of getting latest news currently. In this case they will see more opinion published by celebrities on Facebook, twitter or many other websites than older people who probably don't have time to do such things. Therefore, the words said by celebrities will certainly affect their mind since they are witnessing them almost all day.
In a nutshell, I maintain the idea that younger people will pay more attentions on the opinion of the celebrities than older people.
And I believe that the opponents will compromise after being exposed to my article.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, furthermore, really, second, so, therefore, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1853.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9151193634 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57914154258 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535809018568 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.5140721771 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.8125 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5625 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8125 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.53405017921 154% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295858270288 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0962081233602 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0948429054477 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148225017219 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108684420803 0.0645574589148 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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