Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Faced with the fierce society, young people have to focus on how to make them become competated on the career. In other words, they seems have no choice to find their own dreams, because there are more and more pressures on them. To keep the pace with other people, what they should do is to take the advise from society. So, in my opinion, they are suffering the terrible more intense period than before.
First of all, to be successful is going to become the eventual target for those people, even though they have no idea about what the meaning of success. There are thouands of expercts emphesase the importance of being successful man, and parents also educate their children to purchasing it. As a result of it, lots of extra tasks have assigned by their parents. For example, After coming home, exhuasted child play music instruments with endless practices, because study shows that playing music instruments will contribute to their development of brain. Evidently, it might benefit the future of children, but it also hurts the relations between children and parents at the same time.
Secondly, with the development of world, some rules won't be appropriate for current time. It is obvious that the rules should change over time with the advancement of society. For instance, teachers used to arrange students searching for a lot of books in library in order to complish a paper. This method is not efficient as searching for the Internet. No matter what resource people want to find, it is easy to get with a few seconds. Therefore, it is advisable to update the way of finding material of writing paper.
To sum up, the pressure coming from the society make young people confused about what they need to do. Designing a proper purpose for children's future according to their talent is a vital thing that parents should do. On the other hand, people should clear the obstacles that strict their creativity, and focus on their life instead of other thing.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'seem'
Suggestion: seem
...ted on the career. In other words, they seems have no choice to find their own dreams...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 298, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... people, what they should do is to take the advise from society. So, in my opinion, they a...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 302, Rule ID: GIVE_ADVISE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'advice' (a noun)?
Suggestion: advice
...ple, what they should do is to take the advise from society. So, in my opinion, they a...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, in other words, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1637.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85756676558 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4296129959 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569732937685 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.7262597158 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.9444444444 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7222222222 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 5.45110844103 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0893600035556 0.236089414692 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0303627920215 0.076458572812 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0360203525698 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0591191884915 0.150856017488 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0321914681941 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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