Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's world, the issue of incorporation of people in the development of communities is in dispute. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is whether the young people give enough time to helping their communities. Some people possess the conviction that young people, like their precedent, attempt to assist in flourishing of their communities, whereas others hold exactly the opposite and allege that nowadays, young people are indifferent to their societies. I personally contend that almost all of the young peoples of 21 century, unlike prior generations, do not spend enough time on helping their communities. To substantiate my point of view, the following paragraphs represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that by elapsing time every day the young people become more and more irresponsible. They do not spend time on studying books sufficely, most of them, similar to their childhood, waste time by computer games, large number of them do not have a part-time job during their education and still are dependent to their parents. Maybe the paramount cause of this appalling phenomenon is the bad upbringing of them during their childhood. Nowadays, in most families, father and mother do not demand their children to accomplish some of the routine works of house. They just want their children to study lessons of school and their pretext for such a demeanor is that they are merely child. I think this behaviour is absolutely devastating and in the future can cause dozens of troubles for their children. Thus, the young people of society would not have a sense of responsibility to their communities and become indifferent to it.
The last but not least reason by which the claim is justified is that in many countries the government do not pay enough attention to the young people. In other words, they do not trust their boys or girls to depute some superficial works to them. As a consequence, this improper behaviour leads to the lack of self-confidence and self-esteem of young people which results in discouraging of them toward their community. To shed light on this issue, I can exemplify my country. If you investigate the average age of the peoples which are in authority, you would see that this average is more than 50 years. This means that government and parliament of my country is old and this could be catastrophic, because, old peoples by elapsing time become more and more cautious and they lose their courage and motivation.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that the incorporation of young people in the community become less and this is not a good news and can have a terrible result in future. Consequently, it is highly recommended that by modifying the treating methods, parents prepare their children to be a useful ingredient for their society and the peoples in authority help them to grow up better.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 527, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...eties. I personally contend that almost all of the young peoples of 21 century, unlike pri...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'century' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'centuries'.
Suggestion: centuries
...t almost all of the young peoples of 21 century, unlike prior generations, do not spend...
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind elucidating'.
Suggestion: mind elucidating
... reasons. The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...not demand their children to accomplish some of the routine works of house. They just want ...
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Line 5, column 14, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'not the least'.
Suggestion: not the least
...come indifferent to it. The last but not least reason by which the claim is justified ...
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ood news and can have a terrible result in future. Consequently, it is highly recommended...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, may, regarding, so, still, thus, whereas, i think, in brief, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2531.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 500.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.062 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90117976003 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 773.1 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.4937117218 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.55 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292499541323 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0935502302727 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698434361006 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187429162311 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0763381984511 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.