• Do you agree or disagree?
• If parent want their children to do well at school, they should limit the time their children spend on TV.
In this hectic world which there are lots of distracting things, being concentrate is getting harder and harder and when it comes to children it become more difficult. Nowadays parents are worry about their children education and TV’s bad effect on it. Some of them limit the TV time for their child. The question which arises here is should they limit TV time for children if they want their child doing their best at school? Well, as far as I’m concerned I don’t agree with that. In what follows I will explain my reasons.
The first aspect to point out is that limiting children and ordering them what to do, will raise them passive and will take their freedom to think and choose. Furthermore, it can reduce their responsibilities. They grow up as and dependent person. The more you tell children what to do or not, the more they lose their self-esteem. It can have a worse effect on their marks at school. It would be better if you make them to understand the situation and choose their study time and free time and learn them how to manage it. In this way not only have you helped your child to organize time, but also you gave him right to choose.
Another point that comes to mind is there’s no evidence that limiting TV time for children will definitely lead to better scores at school. There’s no relation proved between these two. Many people might think for sure it will be better to keep children away from TV. But when it comes to children it would be different one by one. For example, back to school, I watched all the shows I wanted and still got better marks than some of my classmates that didn’t watch TV back then. Watching TV may be a good hobby for free time for many students and make them ready for doing homework. Also there are lots of channels with educational content including showing experiments or making crafts that can be beneficial for students. It can even be helpful for progress in courses at school. So it would be better to limit the programs s/he watches in order to making a progress in their education.
All in all, I think limiting the time children spend on TV wouldn’t necessarily lead to better marks at school. This behavior can reduce child’s self esteem and takes his freedom. Also there isn’t any study conducted to prove that, it can be beneficial for some students.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, so, still, then, well, for example, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1924.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6028708134 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37489328795 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507177033493 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.4805065824 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.96 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.72 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.32 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.421721126563 0.236089414692 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118035991511 0.076458572812 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11673486782 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.281136239177 0.150856017488 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12993453511 0.0645574589148 201% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 58.1214874552 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.1 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 10.247311828 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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