In terms of whether the lessons include video games is beneficial for children's development. Some people think that playing games can make children relaxed. However, I hold the opposite perpective that it is meaningless and useful for the following reasons.
Firstly, it's better for children to take lessons about sports instend of video games. To be more specific, the outside activities can not help them to strengthen their bodies, but also can add spice to their life and childhood. On the contrary, if young students take lessons about video games, it's more likely for them to be drawned and controlled by the video games since they are still young and don't have self-dicipline. Moreover, if they start touching or playing these video games at young ages, their eyes can be hurted considerably. What a nightmare it would be.
Secondly, it is not practical for children to take lessons about video games. To explain it in detail, instead of increasing their interests in studying, the young students will only inflenced by it and lose the opportunity to make friends, develop friendships and cultivate a sense of team spirit when they are playing outside together. For instance, I enjoyed playing outside with my friends when I was about 6 years old. I knew and learned how to make friends and chat and talk with others, which then motivated me to study harder with the help of my friends and helped me becoming a talkative person with many friends around me through my previous experience. However, if I just took a lesson about video games at that time, I would definitely failed to make such plenty of friends and waste my precious time at such a young age.
At last, I totally believe that taking the lessons about video games cannot be an efficient way to inpire students to study because of the reasons above.
- Do you agree or disagree Some people believe that video games could inspire young students interest and make their study more efficient rather than distracting them and a waste of time so young students should be allowed to play video games 70
- The most important goal of education is to teach people how to educate themselves 73
- The most important goal of education is to teach people how to educate themselves 73
- The most important goal of education is to teach people how to educate themselves 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 399, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...eo games since they are still young and dont have self-dicipline. Moreover, if they ...
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Line 3, column 576, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to become' or 'become'.
Suggestion: to become; become
...th the help of my friends and helped me becoming a talkative person with many friends ar...
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Line 3, column 748, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'fail'
Suggestion: fail
... games at that time, I would definitely failed to make such plenty of friends and wast...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, for instance, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1511.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 312.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84294871795 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5628662885 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538461538462 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.9979983993 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.928571429 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2857142857 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.14285714286 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320584557491 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113155814709 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0834346714734 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201314272738 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049829017218 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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