Do you agree or disagree with the statement:
It it better to spend money on travelling and vacation than save money for the future.
We are under great pressure from our major occupation every day, no matter work or study. To keep a more fulfilled and interesting life, learning a new hobby seems an excellent way. Many prefer to learn to cook or craft, while, from my perspective, trying a new athletic challenge is obviously a more reasonable choice.
To start with, sports are conducive to humans physically. Thanks to the development of technology, modern people have adapted to this sedentary lifestyle, which is the major cause of many diseases like arteriosclerosis, obesity and diabetes. A physical hobby can make a difference effectively. For example, my friend Nancy used to spend hours on the Internet, addicted to computer games and surviving on junk food. She grew overweight and got diabetes at the age of 20. It was when she got the doctor’s diagnosis that she realized how serious her situation was and it was urgent to make a change. She cut off from the Internet completely and started to swim everyday. After half a year, her insulin dropped back to the normal level and she was able to lead a normal life. She decided to keep the habit of swimming and also tried many new and more intriguing hobbies like hip-hop dancing and mountain hiking. In this way she managed to keep her body in a healthy state.
In addition, sports are beneficial to the mental state of human beings. According to many studies, while working out, a hormone called endorphin is released, which helps relieve headaches and the tension that restricts blood vessels in the brains, leaving the person in a good mood. What’s more, those who exercise are more likely to get into shape and be more confident about themselves. My classmates Jay and Ray are two identical twin brothers who grew up in the same environment. Jay enjoys all kinds of sports like volleyball and baseball while Ray is a more introverted type who is always reading in his corner. Everyone can tell them apart instantly despite their resemblance from the outside. Jay has this signature smile on his face all the time, who is outgoing and always ready to help. Ray, on the other hand, never has eye contacts with others and tends to be quite sensitive and reserved. When there are big challenges like finals or tough assignments, the contrast is even more noticeable. Jay always takes initiatives, making preparations positively while Ray always melts down under great pressure.
Admittedly, cooking and making things by hand can offer many pleasure as well. It is great opportunities to bond with others when sharing homemade cupcakes. It is also quite rewarding to receive other’s compliment when presenting the outfit you manufactured. However, cooking and crafting cannot benefit the body and mind simultaneously like sports do, and as challenging tasks, they can exert more stress.
In a nutshell, among these three options, I would choose a new sport to enrich my life, for I can gain more from it, both physically and spiritually.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, well, while, for example, in addition, to start with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2510.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 500.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83616924742 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 305.0 212.727598566 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 783.9 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.2835932621 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.6428571429 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8571428571 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.35714285714 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0389408799318 0.236089414692 16% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.010759736854 0.076458572812 14% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0195996711222 0.0737576698707 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0270389111161 0.150856017488 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0212910959304 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 86.8835125448 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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