Do you agree or disagree?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important Sthan studying hard in school.
It is undoubtedly true that studying hard is more beneficial in order to attain success in future jobs than getting along with people.I critically feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in my body paragraphs.
First and foremost,studying hard can make people obtain professional basic skills, which is the foundation for many occupations to settle down. In other words, one can be self-sufficient and would not need to collaborate before attaining success.My personal experience is an intelligent example of this.My younger brother studied computer science in school and think of getting a data analyst position with facebook.So he took some courses on Coursera, Udemy, just to reinforce his knowledge.At that time the classes were overwhelming because of the voluminous assignment that needs to be submitted,but then,he was able to adapt.All this would definitely paved the way for him to excel his future job.If he hadn't been industrious in taking these courses there is high chance that he might experience challenges in the long run.
Furthermore, studying hard comes with numerous opportunities such as getting different certifications which could automatically enhance one's chance of getting to the top in one's career.Drawing from my own experience, my uncle has always remain studious while he was in school.He has done a myriad of certification in order to align himself to getting a position with a petrochemical company.In Fact, before he completed his program he had already gotten skills to culminate him to getting to the manager position.So with this, there is high chances of getting the managerial sit without starting from the scratch like others.
In light of the reasons mentioned, i am of the opinion that hard work is very important in attaining success in years to come job.This is because it helps one to acquire some knowledgeable skills, and because it open doors of opportunity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, so, then, while, in fact, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1626.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 307.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29641693811 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11330113445 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.618892508143 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 20.6003584229 24% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 61.0 20.1344086022 303% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 225.457224324 48.9658058833 460% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 325.2 100.406767564 324% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 61.4 20.6045352989 298% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 15.6 5.45110844103 286% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 31.0 5.5376344086 560% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159820762386 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103841333782 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501103062048 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109204761939 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0532957001766 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 34.2 11.7677419355 291% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 9.56 58.1214874552 16% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 6.10430107527 239% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 27.1 10.1575268817 267% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.35 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.88 8.01818996416 136% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 26.4 10.0537634409 263% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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