Essay topics: TPO-20 - Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans

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Essay topics: TPO-20 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by KyraD on Tue, 10/10/2017 - 06:05

“Be the one who dares”, the archaic saying comes from the British Naval Army. It means that the one who takes a risk may gain the victory. I conclude that neither in the war nor in life, people can be successful without taking a risk and moving forward. The capability to invent a new technology or to augment the established technique needs a willingness to take a risk. The successful people experience this repeatedly, therefore, I agree with the statement above.

First, the exemplary person always takes a calculated risk so they can produce the brand new idea or invention. They do not jump to an arbitrary decision but they execute a rational, comprehensive, and well-investigated plan. Whereas the common people neither took a risk and choose to play safe and hinder a drastic change, the noteworthy person can foresee the benefit of taking the risk for an invention of cutting-edge technologies and cultivate it to make a substantial profit. For example, Bill Gates chose to drop out from Harvard in pursuit of Microsoft, from general view this is a harmful decision but for him, but for him it is the right thing to do. He successfully made the windows software and built his empire from zero. The rest is a history.

Second, the success comes from a continuous upgrade of knowledge. They believe that science is expanding; they understand that the modern now will become obsolete in decades later. Furthermore, the ability to do research and read the market makes the successful people always a step ahead. For instance, Samsung always works in perpetual research for the new television technology. Instead, stick to their trademark, they insist on finding a television that efficient, everlasting and durable. Hence, they successfully invent the LCD TV and become the leading market.

Lastly, although they try new things, the successful people also ready to fail. The risky decision sometime comes with less than hopeful results. When they try a different thing, they may lose their money or decrease the value of their stock. Instead become dismal with the situation, they take the lesson and start over. This new knowledge becomes a building block of skill and expertise. Practice makes perfect; this applies in the search of greatness. In fact, Colonel Sanders failed to make his well-known fried chicken a thousand time before the chicken we all love arrived.

Ultimately, a success comes with hard work and perseverance. It also tangles with bravery and ability to improve. All things considered, I completely agree with the statement above.

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Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 688, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'windows'' or 'window's'?
Suggestion: windows'; window's
...t thing to do. He successfully made the windows software and built his empire from zero...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 244, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Instead,
...y or decrease the value of their stock. Instead become dismal with the situation, they ...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 183, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pletely agree with the statement above.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, lastly, may, second, so, therefore, well, whereas, for example, for instance, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2161.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10874704492 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79992678565 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562647754137 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.6267684404 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.037037037 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6666666667 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7037037037 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251008106143 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0639702319018 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0448560532167 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137377092845 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0180576358176 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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