As technologies being much more advanced, we can keep in touch with relatives who might live far away from us more frequently in comparison to the past. I am of the opinion that the extended family is more important now than it was in a few decades ago. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, mobile devices today enable us to contact people who are not in the same place or even same time zone, and social media lead to the connection between us and people we have little chance to meet in reality. Thanks to the progressive society we live in today, we are able to participate to people's daily life in a digital way. For instance, my grandfather lived in mainland China loves writing and publishing his own articles online. When I was little, I only saw him about once or twice a year and had little common topic to talk about. As I grow up and start to read his posts and articles, I found out that I actually have a lot of questions and ideas to share with him. If it were not for the advancement of smartphone, I will never have the opportunity to get this close with my grandpa.
Secondly, the bond of a family needs lots of effort to maintain, however, it is the inventions of communication application that help us to build the bond stronger. Take my family for a compelling example, we have a family members group on the mobile application. And when it comes to festivals and important events, we can plan a family gathering easily using the app. Since it is effortless compared to making phone calls to each family unit within our big family, it increases the willingness to participate the activities.
To sum up, I firmly believe that extended family today is even more important than in the past. This is because the online interaction enables us to participate in each others' life more easily, and those innovative mobile applications reduce the effort taken to maintain a bounded family.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 323, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a digital way" with adverb for "digital"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...le to participate to peoples daily life in a digital way. For instance, my grandfather lived in ...
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Line 7, column 170, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
...ction enables us to participate in each others life more easily, and those innovative ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, as to, for instance, i feel, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1613.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56940509915 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65046223209 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.57223796034 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6893037185 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.533333333 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5333333333 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.93333333333 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156000408633 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0607506148487 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0991836108916 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10978741805 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0609220074266 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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