Extended family importance
"Home is the place where we find peace". I read this quote when I was in school. It is true that home is the place where we find peace when we live together with our whole family. But, nowadays, situation is completely different. Personally, In my opinion, I agree that people are away from their family which has made extended family less important. I feel this way for two main reason which I will explain the following passage.
To begin with, families are moving toward urban area to get better opportunity secure a job. Evidently, If people wants to support their family with all the benefits and best care, they should have a well paid job and to get the job, they have to shift to the big cities, away from from their family. Thus, when family move to other town, they get separated from their whole family members, which leads to decrease in number of joint family and make it less important. It can be best demonstrated by my personal experience. When my father got the job in the railway, he was told to move to the other city which was in other part of the country. Unfortunately, my father has to take big decision to leave their family and move along with my mother to the assigned place. Although he was not happy, he has to shift to new the place just because he has to take care and stand on his own feet to support other family members. Similarly, other people are also bound to take such hard decision which has made extinction of extended families because it can be found that majority of family members are leaving away from their parent or their children.
Secondly, urban development has attracted citizens to shift from rural area to the city. Obviously, technology has dominated the world and has made human life easy in every field whether it is related to the comfort or to medical facility. Thus, people want to utilize these benefit so that they can enjoy their life easily. As most of the people are busy with there work, they want to live in a society which is advanced and can take care of their family with every needs. Hence, city fulfill all such demands of a person. Moreover, people are also living their family just because they are not able to get adjust to the life of village. For instance, in order o give best education to their children, people are shifting to the city. Further, rural areas still lack behind in providing basic necessity to local such as t different place for job so they get separate. water, electricity and many more. Due to there reasons, people are finding to change their location. The main reason which breaks the family comes when family's elder member does not wish to leave their native place just because to get better facilities. For older people, they love to live in the rural area, especially to the place where they have spent all their life. This lead to division of the families and make joint family as less important.
In conclusion, I would like to say that many factors has make joint family less popular. This is because people want to live a happy and health life of city ans because some are unfortunate to live their family due to their job
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, similarly, so, still, thus, well, as to, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2581.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 564.0 407.700716846 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57624113475 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87326216964 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28209811517 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446808510638 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 840.6 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2022238941 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4482758621 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.10344827586 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188069115152 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561735864543 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0779333573798 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128756649325 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0339893136482 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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