People learn better from those at their own level- such as fellow students or co-worker- than from those at a higher level, such as teacher or supervisors
Whereas some people believe that it is better to learn from those who are of the same age, some people believe that it is better to learn from our seniors. Personally, I disagree that people will learn better from those at their own level than from their superiors. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explain in the following passage.
First of all, our superiors are more experienced in their work field. Evidently, If we are doing any work or a project, then it is found that our team members always consist of one person who is at a higher level than others. Consequently, that one person guides us to get the best result. Seniors are more experienced and knowledgeable than us. Hence, it is always better to learn from them because till now they have done a lot of projects and came across many difficult situations than those who are at same level of us. As a result, our senior will able to guide us properly. This is best demonstrated by my personal experience. When I was doing my job and had assigned with a project. I remember, I got stuck at a particular problem and I had discussed with most of my colleague but none of them was able to give a better solution. Later I approached the Head of the Department,in just one look, he was able to find the minor mistake which no one was able to find out, even the people who were of my age and working in the same department. Thus, it prove me that people who are higher in level from us, will also help you get better by learning new things from them.
Secondly, Our seniors are more experienced in the life as well. People, who are in higher position from us, has experienced life more than us. Consequently, If we ask for any personal help from them then they guide us in better way in comparison to our fellow friends. Thus supervisor or teacher will give more matured and relatable answer than people who are of same age. For example, I remember when I was feeling low just because I was not able to get the admission in my dream college. Everyone supported me. But, the thought which my mentor shared with me had touched me deeply. It was so motivating and real that I still remember his words and use it again whenever I feel sad. Hence, I believe that everyone person have their own value but when it come to learn about new thing from a person than I will prefer take help from my seniors.
In conclusion, I believe that we should never stop to learn from our superiors. This because they are more experienced in their respective field and in life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...ally, I disagree that people will learn better from those at their own level than from...
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Suggestion:
...as able to give a better solution. Later I approached the Head of the Department,...
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Suggestion: , in
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Message: Did you mean 'proves'?
Suggestion: proves
...orking in the same department. Thus, it prove me that people who are higher in level ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ill also help you get better by learning new things from them. Secondly, Our s...
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Suggestion:
...ore than us. Consequently, If we ask for any personal help from them then they gu...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ay in comparison to our fellow friends. Thus supervisor or teacher will give more ma...
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... was so motivating and real that I still remember his words and use it again when...
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Message: Did you mean 'comes'?
Suggestion: comes
...person have their own value but when it come to learn about new thing from a person ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, then, thus, well, whereas, for example, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 83.0 43.0788530466 193% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2068.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.40938166311 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44029641159 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441364605544 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 656.1 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5303678878 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.72 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.76 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297939994048 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0839418449577 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119863491087 0.0737576698707 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210538944255 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118372639691 0.0645574589148 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.3 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.75 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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