extended family is less important now than it was in the past
The family is an undeniable part of human's life through time. Nowadays, with the development of technology, some people do not have any free time to spend with their family. They believe that the importance of family decreased compare to the past. In my perspective, part of the family in our life is increasing and still is significant.
The first reason to point is that the advancement of technology causes many economic problems for families. In the present time because of the financial problem for the families, they have to devote most of their time working to provide comfortable facilities for their children. Therefore, they do not have much time to spend with their children which can bad effect on them since they need attention. They usually fill their absence by putting their children with their grandparents. In this way grandparents taking care of them and not let them feel alone. For example, my friend’s parent has to work in two places because of their financial problem. So, they put their friend with their grandparent and aunts to taking care of them and check his study grade. They also work with him to study and if he has a weakness in specific subjects, they aid him to understand it.
The second reason worth mentioning is that parents need someone to guide them when they face problems since they do not have plenty of life experience. It is a plausible chance that their relatives had the same situation as them when they were younger. Therefore, they can compensate for their lack of experience with consulting with their families and find rational solutions for their problems. Moreover, families are a great environment to feel relaxed and loved. Since many people’s mind are very busy in the present they, extended family can play a prominent and crucial role in their life. Therefore, by spending just a little time with them they can release all their tension and negative thoughts. For example, a student who studies for the entrance exam of a university is under a lot of pressure and by hanging out with his cousins, they can make his nervous fade away.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned reason, Family still has vital effects on human lives and their role in the life of all people is significant due to the people’s hectic lifestyle and developed technology.
- In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age. 60
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying. 60
- TPO 8 80
- In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age. 65
- TPO 6 Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children 60
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, second, so, still, therefore, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1947.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89195979899 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67841081574 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515075376884 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.166248311 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.35 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0595543954575 0.236089414692 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0309492914172 0.076458572812 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590761437473 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0570822269959 0.150856017488 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0531641429875 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.