A foreign visitor has only one day to spend in your country. Where should this visitor go on that day? Why?
If a person is going to visit Brazil just for one day, I would say that is not enough. But, if I have to give him some good tips about my country, Rio de Janeiro is the best place to go. Honestly, as a huge city, Rio has some problems. On the other hand, Rio de Janeiro is known as the Marvelous City in Brazil. During his trip in Rio, the visitor needs to go to the Sugar Loaf, the Cristo Redentor, and the beaches.
Firstly, because Rio is between the ocean and the mountains, it has gorgeous natural places. If someone wants to take very good pictures from the city, he needs to visit the Sugar Loaf. This mountain is in the middle of the city, and from the top is possible to see almost everything. People go to the top of the mountain in a small car sustained by wire cables. And, this is the best part of the visit.
Secondly, the traveler has to enjoy the Cristo Redentor statue. Cristo is one of the most important touristic point of Rio. While the foreign person is at Cristo, he can buy some souveniers and take a famous picture at the Cristo’s feet.
Thirdly, but not less important, all visitor need to spend some hours in the ocean. The city has about 15 different beaches with white sand and warm water. Making the visitor feeling as an important guest, people from Rio make the beach environment marvelous. Consequently, all tourists says that they loved Copacabana or Ipanema.
To conclude, Rio de Janeiro is my first choice of city in Brazil. It is absolutely a very famous place of the world. Even if it has some violence, it is a very beautiful place to visit. Having beautiful touristic points, Rio also has a very nice population.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, honestly, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, while, as to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1352.0 1977.66487455 68% => OK
No of words: 306.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.41830065359 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3879744859 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539215686275 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 426.6 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 19.6918436791 48.9658058833 40% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 64.380952381 100.406767564 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5714285714 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90476190476 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122165980948 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0334249475001 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0465940509125 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0603147777384 0.150856017488 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0436955246631 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.7 11.7677419355 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.76 10.9000537634 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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