friends influence students more or teachers?
The influence one percieves from others is one the most crucial concepts in life, as it leads one to shape the behavior and characteristic and shape the ensuing life. hence, one of the most controversial issues amongst many parents to determine whether teachers provide more influence to their children or it is their children's friends who take the influential part. As far as I am concerned in the state of ambivalence, I might lean toward selecting friends. Conceivably, many parents believe that kids are influenced by their supervisors, however, there are reasons such as the same knowledge-base and trust which can declare a higher influence of friends. I will interpret my statement in the following essay.
First, a shared amount of wisdom is advantageous to shape the behavior due to the valuable understanding included in it. Being influenced by a person holding the same acknowledgment helps to broaden one's characteristics and enrich one's life in different aspects. To influence a person one should share understandable ideas; ideas from a person with the same knowledge, education, etc.and it is hard to imagine a teacher with such background. Granted, a teacher holds more solid views to share, but a student cannot understand a significant number of those ideas. As an illustrative example, some years ago when I entered high school at Beheshti school in Iran I had a colleague named Sara. Sara was a playful student and preferred to enjoy her time during class than listening to the teacher. In the beginning, everyone assumed that she is going to continue her behavior, ignoring the teachers, but it was not true. Fortunately, Sara's friend convinced her to pay attention during the class, talking about her personal experiences in an understandable language. Sara was meant to be a bad student and the teacher could not influence her, but things did not go as everyone predicted, the friend influenced and saved her academic life. As one can see, being in the same age range influenced the shared knowledge which associates to accepting viewpoints.
Secondly, it is not presumptuous to judge a trust level based on shared experiences. No man can truly assume that people who experience the same events will trust each other easier, but it is evident that we trust people who we spend most of our time with easier. Two people who appear to trust each other effortlessly might have spent time together and behave more similar. My personal experiences are the foundation of my next point. One spends most of his or her time with friends which leads them to share certain behavior and is imperative to trust. Surely, it is wiser to assume the friend's influence than to neglect it.
I am of the conviction that one needs someone with the same amount of information and behavior to talk to. It is my personal assumption and its effect is evident in the level of trust and idea-acceptance between friends. Regarded the aforementioned reasons, I conclude that students are more influenced by their colleagues, but a coin has two sides and an edge to connect them; so it is wise to not neglect the influence teachers have on the students.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, such as, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2624.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 528.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9696969697 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79356345386 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93419504212 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503787878788 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 819.0 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6276065221 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.333333333 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.16666666667 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312872822059 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0823369819728 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0998586892902 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193431735455 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0665046144367 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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