Numerous major changes have occurred in the modern era, one of which is an increase in people's life span. There are several factors that contribute to this improvement. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate more on two of the most significant reasons for this phenomenon.
First and foremost, our healthcare system is constantly improving. Many doctors, researchers and engineers continuously strive to develop more efficacious medicine, healing methods and laboratory apparatus. The more the technology upgrades, the more sophisticated and comprehensive such medications, machinery and techniques become. While people died even due to a simple infection in the past, many ailing people now have a chance to be cured even of the most serious diseases, thanks to such a vast amelioration in treatment methods and drugs. For instance, the result of a research published in Nature magazine in March 2017 indicated that scientists have discovered a medicine that can eliminate AIDS, which was previously considered incurable. Now the lives of millions of people are saved due to this new innovation. Thus, it goes without saying that innovative health care methods have helped people to enjoy a longer life.
The second important contributing factor to the general increase in people's lifespan is the changes in their lifestyle. Nowadays, people take better care of themselves and enjoy more comfort than they did in the past. Life, in general, has become much easier. For instance, in the past, people were forced to undergo arduous tasks and chores such as cultivating the crops for food, bringing water from rivers, and building their own houses with minimum tools and assistance. In contrast, now the advances in technology have made life more convenient than before. In addition, in recent years, governments have obliged companies to provide more holidays for their workers. Thus, people have more opportunities to travel or focus on leisure activities to release their stresses and relax. Now people have less demanding jobs, and after their work hours, they can spend time on their hobbies. Many people go to the gym, play sports, meet with their friends, etc. All of these factors help people to be healthier both physically and psychologically. Research shows that such changes in lifestyle have dramatic changes in people's lifespan.
In conclusion, many factors have played a role in the augmentation of people's lifespan. Nowadays, not only people enjoy better health care and medication, but they also have a more convenient life than in the past. We should expect this trend to continue as new advances in technology can enhance our lives even more than we can imagine in future.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. 73
- In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of thisphenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay. 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Numerous major changes have occurred in ...
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Message: Use simply 'innovation'.
Suggestion: innovation
...illions of people are saved due to this new innovation. Thus, it goes without saying that inno...
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...our lives even more than we can imagine in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, thus, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, in general, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2283.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2969837587 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80327011354 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552204176334 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 714.6 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.7980688311 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.125 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9583333333 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04166666667 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13003443952 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0415785223202 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.033193001865 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0787217624291 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0276780091438 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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