Recent news regarding governments’ interference in the private lives of their citizens has sparked a debate on whether governments should be allowed to intrude upon their citizens’ freedom for the sake of national security. Some people find such an idea objectionable. However, I agree that national security is an acceptable excuse for the infringement of people’s freedom. With the following essay, I will demonstrate the two reasons supporting my point of view.
To begin with, violation of a citizen’s freedom for national security is acceptable because it is meant to shield a wider population from danger. Since the beginning of the 21st century, there has been a noticeable rise in the number of terrorist attacks all across the globe. Therefore, it is imperative for government agencies to foil such attacks when they are being conceptualised. For example, since 9/11, airports have installed sophisticated security systems before allowing passengers inside the gates of the airport, and in some extreme cases, such as the airport in the Israeli city of Tel Aviv, security checks are carried out before passengers set foot in the airport. This may seem intrusive at times, but such thorough security checks are meant to protect the airport staff, the cabin crew and other passengers from being harmed during their flights.
On top of that, government agencies should be allowed to intrude upon their citizens’ personal liberties to ensure that safety regulations are adequately followed. Without proper safety precautions, people in certain jobs can easily threaten the lives of many people. For instance, school bus drivers and pilots must undergo a series of medical tests periodically. This is because they must drive or fly a lot of passengers daily, and if they have problems with their health, such as eyesight problems, they can easily put their passengers’ lives in jeopardy. Therefore, these seemingly invasive exams can earmark drivers and pilots unfit for their lines of work.
To sum up, the government’s intrusion on citizens’ private lives are meant to protect people from dangerous situations, and to make sure that people are abiding safety regulations. For these reasons, I find that governments should be allowed to infringe on the freedom of their people to guarantee society’s safety.
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- As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. 75
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, for example, for instance, such as, to begin with, to sum up, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2004.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46049046322 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09311235321 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561307901907 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.7157503762 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.25 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9375 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8125 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206129817158 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.076528031707 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658931904134 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143839363854 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0502828566403 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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