If u could change one important thing about your town, what would it be
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that nothing is constant in this world, everyone is striving to improve his circumstances by hook and crook. In this regard, societies or communities where one’s life is of paramount importance. There are tons of debates on what people extremely wants to change in their cities. With the advent in technology, it is critically important to upgrade the environment by taking as much benefits as one can . I remember a famous quote here.” Good, bad, or indifferent; if you do not invest in technology, you are going to be left behind,”. Subsequently, If I were asked, I would definitely say that the major change I want to see in my town would be availability of internet services. I would delve into most crucial reasons to substantiate my viewpoints.
The first compelling reason corroborating my idea is that information is power, which can enlighten the lives of people and change the picture of a society at 360 degrees. To be more specific, it provides them with an opportunity to keep them more informed, and up to date about their surroundings. Internet is a fastest mean to circulate any agenda, and inform them what is going on around them. By way of illustration, Last month, our neighbouring town residents raise their voices against the corrupted leader through internet. It was arduous to reach the eminent authorities without internet access. The town dwellers created a platform on internet, and every member of the town participated to vote against that leader. Finally their voices reached to the government, and that resulted is dismissal of hypocrite leader. Moreover, it is worth mentioning that countries like United state consider provision of internet as a basic right of citizens and necessitate it to everyone. It is crystal clear to see that availability of internet would raise awareness in public.
The second rationale rooted in the notion that internet can provide the chance to people to learn and make themselves more educated. Not only they can get to learn from far-off places but also they can get job opportunities. It is axiomatic that in a flourishing society, educated people have not only high employment options but the crimes rates are significantly reduced too. My neighbouring town’s example can elucidate my stand point. A decade ago, before internet came to the town, people were not literate and were not interested in employment, and crimes rate was pretty high there. But with the internet access, people started getting education online and began applying for jobs. As a result, a peaceful community started there.
BY perusing the above paragraphs one can infer that that facility is brought in my town it provides town dwellers with myriad of advantages. For the sake of brevity, few points are reiterating. First, internet in a great source of information that enrich the lives of people; second, it enhances the education opportunity for people. As for writer’s suggestion, I vehemently urge higher authorities to pay attention to the situation of my city and assist us to create a productive community there.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, moreover, second, so, well, as for, as a result, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2617.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 513.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10136452242 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94869566568 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 282.0 212.727598566 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549707602339 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 832.5 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3765555965 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.9259259259 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.40740740741 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171752660128 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0409839154779 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0504520312498 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104083280487 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0750411205388 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 86.8835125448 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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