If you could ask a famous person one question, what would you ask? Why?
There are many people nowadays, whose biggest wish is to become famous, by any means. They dream to become actors, singers, TV presenters, journalist and so forth. I often hear that celebrity is not exactly what it seems to be. If I had the opportunity to ask someone famous one question I think it would be "How public figure status has influenced your life?". I will explain my choice, in the following essay.
To begin with, I want to mention that celebrity brings both advantages and disadvantages. Once you are constantly present in the public eye, every step and move is followed by millions of curious people, creating an enormous pressure on the person who is being watched. Journalists tend to analyze every gesture, mood, smile, having the tendency to exaggerate the facts. The way they present the events influence the public reaction towards the famous individuals, a reaction that can be negative or positive. Most of the times, common people do not realize that the criticized person is just a human being, with normal feelings who can be seriously affected by different rumors. For instance, I heard for many years how journalists made fun of the babyface of Justin Bieber. They also used to say, that it is not for sure if he is a male or female. As far as I remember, these rumors started when he was about fourteen, so he was basically a child. A few days ago I read an article about mental health and Justin Bieber admitted that he has developed a syndrome due to the negative stories about him. He said that the last decade was a challenge for him and that he hopes he can surpass this black period of his life.
Secondly, there are persons who like to drag attention upon them and individuals who prefer a more intimate life. Unfortunately, for the latter category, this is not always realizable. I wonder if the advantages they get from being rich surpass the disadvantages they have to face with. I wonder if expensive cars, clothes, holidays, houses and so forth worth a lifetime of exposure. I have often seen public persons who were trying to avoid paparazzi when spending leisure time, so obviously, it was not a comfortable situation for them.
All in all, I would like to find out how celebrity influence people's life, if the advantages of being popular surpass the disadvantages that this lifestyle brings.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 385, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... so forth worth a lifetime of exposure. I have often seen public persons who were...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, second, secondly, so, for instance, i think, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1950.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80295566502 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69608030997 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588669950739 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.7455552096 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.8571428571 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2380952381 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10913078548 0.236089414692 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0255770052049 0.076458572812 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046219620374 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.065043264725 0.150856017488 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0551020090577 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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