Without a shadow of a doubt, humanitarian activities play a pivotal role in mitigating the sorrows and difficulties of people who can not afford their expenditures. An unanswered question in this area is that people devote their humanitarian aids to which kinds of charitable organizations. Despite arguments asserting that satisfying the rudiment necessities of people like housing and foods deserve more attention rather other charitable aids, I believe otherwise, maintaining that the money donated to people to run their own business has more influence on their well-being of the society. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my point of view through two compelling reasons.
The first exquisite point corroborating my stance on this subject is that by helping people to start their own business, other people of the community benefit from their company. Even the smallest business offers some jobs for other individuals directly and indirectly. Consequently, more people can afford their expenditure on housing, food, and medical care. Furthermore, society uses the services and products of these companies to fulfill people’s needs, and it is not necessary for the government to import similar commodities produced by small businesses. For instance, had a charity in my country not supported people to run their own business, my country's government would spend over 100,000,000 dollars to import foreign accessories annually.
Another reason to be mentioned is that the family of people who receive money for running their own business will not require any needs from charities. To be more specific, these families can pay the expense of children's educations. So, their kids are more likely to attain university and find decent jobs in the future. In addition, they can learn skills from their parents and follow in their footsteps. To put this in a vivid picture, my father ran a small company by the fund of a charity ten years ago. Currently, one of my brothers is working alongside my father, and he could have made a fortune in this way.
Reflecting upon all the reasons mentioned above, one soon realizes that providing money for people who can not start their own business alone has priority over other charitable activities.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, furthermore, if, so, well, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1896.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26666666667 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88651077331 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566666666667 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 594.9 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.0750317393 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.5 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5625 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165381096415 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0550284952432 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0446217199094 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115819877043 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302088161081 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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