If you could change one important thing about your hometown what would you change Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer

Essay topics:

If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer

Making amendments in my city would require great efforts specially from the major. He/she is the special person who needs to undertake responsibilities in order to improve the cities' needs. However, if I am given the chore to work on project to change my city for good, I would definitely start by raising up universities.
First of all, not only does the university provide profits for the city but, also, it starts up new ways of employment. New students coming from other cities nearby require housing, therefore the renting system grows and consequently its profits alike.
Moreover, the desideratum of new companies appears to be a great deal because with so many students graduating from universities it is highly likely that those will look for jobs further on. Thus, there will be necessity of industries for fledglings. As one example of the relation between university and company can be seen in the U.S. where are located many universities and industries all around the U.S. territory. Another great example of universities are the community colleges created by Barack Obama. They are one step for students who crave for universities.
Furthermore, not merely will my town grow with colleges but also will the state and the country. If my hometown is not big, it will turn to be with colleges advent. Also, my town may flourish depending on the number of universities. For instance, the past decade my town was not that big comparing to nowadays. Thanks fully to the universities, it is now considered the third biggest hometown in Sao Paulo state.
Finally, as it is stated above colleges and universities are the best way to make the development of any town flourish fast .

Votes
Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 124, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...he development of any town flourish fast .
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, third, thus, for instance, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1407.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 283.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97173144876 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84298443609 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.590106007067 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.0746185921 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.9375 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6875 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.875 5.45110844103 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.050016530824 0.236089414692 21% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0179659122824 0.076458572812 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0230000817478 0.0737576698707 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0239404025884 0.150856017488 16% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0229041377815 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.