If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer

There are many things which can be changed in my hometown. I would change the roads in my hometown due to their worst conditions.This essay will discuss the reasons for choosing to change roads in my hometown.

Nowadays road transport plays a very important role in our daily life, we use them to go to hospitals, schools, and our workplaces, such roads are in a devastated state in my hometown. While there is an increase in revenue of my hometown, our roads are still the same way as they were 10 years ago. For example, recently there was an accident which took place in my hometown and unfortunately, the people involved in the accident lost their life because the ambulance could not reach them in time due to the bad road conditions. Roads should be repaired very frequently and there should be road inspection team to monitor it.

Furthermore, due to the increase of the town population, the avg number of vehicles has drastically increased, but the roads are still the same way as they were laid a decade ago. With increasing, traffic conditions expansion projects related to the road transport should be in place, but I didn't see it happening. For example, I can remember when I was in by 4th grade, the time my bus took to reach the school from my house was approximately 15mins, but in the present condition, it would take a minimum of 40 - 50mins to reach the school. Hence, roads should be changed in my hometown to accommodate the increasing traffic conditions in the town.

In conclusion, I trust that the most important thing to be changed in my hometown would the roads. As discussed above the bad road conditions and high traffic in the town is causing a problem to the daily life of the common citizen of the town, in a severe case may also lead to loss of life. Changing the roads could help in minimizing the problems and help the medical, fire or police services to reach their destination in time to prevent any accidental deaths or damages to human properties or lives.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, may, so, still, while, for example, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1648.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 354.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65536723164 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69719449856 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502824858757 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.4082191224 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.769230769 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2307692308 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46153846154 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130670121259 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0662884124996 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731915333419 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107095952895 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0675854456253 0.0645574589148 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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