Independent 21Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.

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Independent 21

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.

Submitted by JahromiMH on Sat, 08/31/2019 - 09:27

Since the dawn of humanity, both education and good relationships have been the critical factors that affcts the future of a person. When it comes to this point, people have some debates as to whether people is better to study hard, or it is better to relate well to people. Personally, I agree with the later group and in what follows, two reasons will be discussed to shed light on this idea.

The first reason coming to my mind to sunstatiate my stand point is that good relations make good friends, and the more good friends you have the more chance of good occupations you will achieve. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. One of my good friends in the colledge introduced me to a laboratory to start a research postition after the graduation, the function that my very good grades didn't perform.

Another equally noteworthy point corroborating my stance is that one of the most important goals of education is to prepare a person to encounter with society. In the other word, schools and universities resemble as a small sample of society and if a student learn to communicate and cooperat the future life would be handled more easily. Some of my colleagues in the medical school are good examples for such experinces. Unfortunately, they had been learnt to study hard in a one-dimentional way witout any social interactions and consequently they didn't match appropriate job positions.

My third reason to support the claim is that the ability to relate well to peaple bring a good chance to get married in a successful way. Marriage and good family is an indispensible part of our social life. My marriage experience is a good example of this argument. I tried to well react with people around and this gave me a chance to visit a girl; the one who I got engaged with and eventually this marriage helped me find a better position.

To sum up, based on all argumentation stated above, I am of the opinion that one dimentional hard studying will reduces the chance of finding a good and successful future job. This is because good relations and social capacities.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, so, third, well, as to, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1745.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79395604396 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80701347679 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53021978022 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6051935882 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.0625 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.625 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207572325261 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0646099650505 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0499707179619 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122024245938 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0369787564394 0.0645574589148 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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