It is better to take a secure job with a low pay than a high pay but high pressure.
When we browse the labour reports of major media in recent years, a high resignation rate<span class="hiddenSpellError" pre="rate "></span> may arise that is referred to as a by-product of modern life. The decision on what kinds of jobs is a primary concern of society. Taking into account the need for employment, some people hold the idea that people should only choose secure jobs but low pay that will be crucial for people’s security. However, I reject this notion and, instead, believe that a job with high pay but heavy pressure is beneficial for personal development.
The most obvious advantage lies in the fact that temporary pressure can help people improve work efficiency. For most people, it is only when placed under pressure that they are motivated enough to make the most of the time to acquire more knowledge and sharpen skills relating to their work, thereby (they can )bring out the best in themselves. According to a recent survey conducted by China Labor Union, which polled over 1000 white-collar workers all over the country who have worked over five years, eighty percent of respondents confessed that they could attain more efficient work efficiency under the temporary pressure, especially the pressure in several days just before the deadline. One of the respondents said that if he worked without pressure, he would not have achieved tremendous work skills, such as liberal thoughts and professional techniques. Therefore, people are more likely to benefit a lot from temporary work pressure, especially in improving work efficiency.
Besides, pressure helps people build a strong will. Mistakes inevitably follow the pressure, but every dark cloud has a silver lining. For example, when I joined a company as a freshman after graduation, due to lack of both domain expertise and work experience, besides the high expectations from the leaders, I suffered from heavy pressures and strained my nerves. Then I usually committed mistakes, but every time I immediately admitted the mistakes and resolved to overcome the obstacles, which ultimately contributed to a tremendous increase in my will. Thanks to the pressures at the initial period, I can get to know more difficulties about my work and continue on my work with a renewed vigor and strong minds.
In conclusion, I firmly believe working a job with high pay, but heavy pressure is the best way for people to improve themselves and develop a resilient personality rather than to enjoy a comfortable life with a secure job.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: to secure
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2143.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25245098039 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16603583682 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580882352941 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.392189398 48.9658058833 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.866666667 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86666666667 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204104358051 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0668905707287 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0918524992533 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157569621347 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122875381842 0.0645574589148 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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