Nowadays we live in very complex modern life. So, we have to do many and different task to fill our days in fruitful tasks. in spits of, others prefer doing one task in all their day long. And in my point of view doing many tasks is very important to live more comfortable and satisfied life. And the impact of my view will be analyzed in this essay for further explain.
First of all, we should learn to do many tasks in our days for different reasons. Firstly, it is very helpful to do many things in the same day, because we can arrange our time in a helpful manner. Also, we can feel more enjoyable with different task. For example, I spent my day all the time between surfing internet to get the maximum benefit in my studying, and talking with my friends to change my mod and decrease my stress level. Moreover, doing my homework and study will for getting high marks as usual. So, this arrangement makes me more relax because i fill my time by useful tasks.
Secondly, doing one task or one type of job creates sort of boring and sens of unproductivity feeling that lead to many problems. For example, a type of official job like the employee that sit a long time from 8 am until 3 pm and return to his home for further sitting in front his television or surfing internet all this time will lead to many physical, social, and psychological problems. Such as, hypertension, high blood sugar, obesity, social exclusion, social isolation. Moreover, psychological problems for instance, depression and isolation.
In conclusion, for all of these reasons i think my point of view is strong and solid enough to clarify the importance of doing many and different tasks on our life, health, and ages.
when we browse the labor reports of major media in recent, a resignation rate ranking may arise that is referred to as by-product of modern life. Career among topics of modern life is a primary concern of society. Taking into the need for employment, some people hold the idea that people should only choose secure jobs that will be crucial for people’s security. However, I reject this notion and instead believe that a job with high paying but heavy pressure is beneficial for personal development.
The most obvious advantage lies in the fact that moderate pressure can help people improve work efficiency. For most people, it is only when placed under pressure that they are motivated enough to make the most of the time to acquire more knowledge and sharpen skills relating to their work, thereby bring out the best in themselves. According to a recent survey conducted by China labor Union, which polled over 1000 white-collar workers all over the country who have worked over five years, eighty percent of respondents confessed that they could attain more efficient work efficiency under the moderate pressure, especially in several days just before the deadline. One of the respondents said that if he worked without pressure, he would not have achieved tremendous work skills, such as liberal thoughts and professional techniques. Therefore, people are more likely to benefit a lot from moderate work pressure, especially in improving work efficiency.
besides, pressure helps people build a strong will. mistakes inevitably follow the pressure, but every dark cloud has a silver lining. For example, when I joined a company as a freshman after graduation, due to lack of both domain expertise and work experience, besides the high expectations from the leaders, I suffered from heavy pressures and strained my nerves. Then I usually committed mistakes, but every time I immediately admitted the mistakes and resolved to overcome the obstacles, which ultimately contributed to a substantial increase in my will. Thanks to the pressures at the beginning, I can get to know more difficulties in my work and continue on my work with a renewed vigor and active minds.
In conclusion, I firmly believe working a job with high paying, but heavy pressure is the best way for people to improve themselves and develop a resilient personality rather than to enjoy a comfortable life with a secure job.
- Nowadays we live in very complex modern life. So, we have to do many and different task to fill our days in fruitful tasks. in spits of, others prefer doing one task in all their day long. And in my point of view doing many tasks is very important to live 3
- Agree or Disagree: Parents today are more involved in their children's education than parents were in the past. 90
- It is better to take a secure job with a low pay than a high pay but high pressure. 83
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2046.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20610687023 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77660497485 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590330788804 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 643.5 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.5431804344 48.9658058833 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.4 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86666666667 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0477952608334 0.236089414692 20% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0174264793261 0.076458572812 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0200858356743 0.0737576698707 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0285932706057 0.150856017488 19% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0121469204369 0.0645574589148 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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