It has recently been announced that a high school in your community would refuse bad-record students. Do you support or oppose this plan? why? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your opinion.
Schools play an important role in students' lives, they learn various skills from school. School helps them to mold their future in the best direction. Every child has the right to get an education, because of that school should not refuse to take a bad-record student in the school. According to me, a school should help students to improve their bad-record. I will elaborate on my reasons in the ensuing paragraphs.
First, students have the right to get an education basically, any school cannot refuse students to get admission. School can help students to improve their performance in their grades. Many schools provide after-school classes for students, who need extra help to understand the subject. For instance, there are numerous diseases in which children feel difficulty in reading and writing, one of them is Dyslexia. In this case, teachers can help students by providing extra classes for reading and writing. School also take oral or viva test rather than a written test for these students. This affords can help students to improve their results and at the end, they might reach a satisfactory result to pass from one grade to another. Moreover, sometimes students are the target of depression because of that they get diverted to bad influence. Most of the students start smoking and taking drugs. Thus, they get bad-record and school suspends them from school. Instead of that school should help them to come out from the addiction. Various organocation is present, through which students can come out from the addiction.
Second, a school can make strict rules for students to control their bad behavior. School authority finds any suspicious behavior then they should check students’ locker, bags, etc. Schools should not allow students to bring guns, drugs, tobacco, etc. In the USA shootout happens many times in school and most of the school students are responsible for the shootout. In a result, the student becomes a shooter because of the psychological problem. They become the victim of depression or rage. Thus, student end becoming criminals, but school can resolve this problem. School teachers should notice the student’s behavior change and should take action accordingly. Further, if any student has a criminal history even though school cannot refuse that school for admission, but a school can observer any suspicious behavior of that student, and as well can report to parents and higher authority.
Let’s put in a nutshell, a school should make strict rules for students and visitors, to avoid a bad influence on students. Every student has the right to get an education, so I strongly believe that school should not refuse students based on his/her bad-record.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
...ake a bad-record student in the school. According to me, a school should help students to impro...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... check students' locker, bags, etc. Schools should not allow students to bri...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, then, thus, well, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2280.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18181818182 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65099388816 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472727272727 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 651.6 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.799373331 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.4285714286 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7142857143 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.10714285714 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11967305226 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0469407511236 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0363016347936 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102877935397 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0229969148012 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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